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You have a permanent job and few weeks ago you have started a part time short course You are not satisfied with it and want to change this part time course Write a letter to your professor explaining why you are not satisfied with your present part time c v.1

You have a permanent job and few weeks ago you have started a part time short course You are not satisfied with it and want to change this part time course Write a letter to your professor explaining why you are not satisfied with your present part time c v. 1
In present scenario, expectations for children by their parents and other members of society have been increased to a greater extent, which further become the reason of academic, social and economic stress for youngsters. This essay would aim at discussing the reasons behind this issue before mentioning measures. To commence with, parental pressure on their wards to get the higher grades in examinations along with participating in the extra curricular activities has become the prominent reason to make them stressed. For instance, nowadays, children are forced to take part in famous games along with getting good marks in exams. Besides this, peer pressure is another reason. In other words, children have to compete with their age mates in terms of academic performance and maintain social trends by following the latest trends in order to get themselves up to date. Hence, these both reasons are indirectly related to economic stress because without strong financial positions these things cannot be possible. However, reduction of this pressure is a need of the hour because if youth buried under these pressures, no nation can grow in any field. To cope up with this situation, firstly, parents have to give quality of upbringing to their wards by inculcating moral values into them, and make them believe in simple living. Apart from this, mentors should have to find the capability of their wards and let him grow in their field of interest, rather than, pressurized him to opt any particular field of study. Therefore, by adapting these methods stress can be reduced from the budding minds. In conclusion, in this stressful environment, children need the guidance of their mentors. Thereby, parents should have to give them support and right advice to make their future bright.
In present scenario, expectations for
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children
by their parents and other members of society have
been increased
to a greater extent, which
further
become the
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reason
of academic, social and economic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
for youngsters. This essay would aim at discussing the
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reasons
behind this issue
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before
mentioning measures.

To commence with, parental
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pressure
on their wards to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the higher grades in examinations along with participating in the
This word is normally spelled as one.
extra curricular
activities has become the prominent
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reason
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stressed
.
For instance
, nowadays,
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children
are forced
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
take part
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
games along with getting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
marks in exams.
Besides
this, peer
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pressure
is another
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reason
.
In other words
,
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children
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
compete with their age mates in terms of academic performance and maintain social trends by following the latest trends in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
themselves up to date.
Hence
, these both
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reasons
are
indirectly
related to economic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
without strong financial positions these things cannot be possible.

However
, reduction of this
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pressure
is a need of the hour
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
if youth buried under these
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pressures
, no nation can grow in any field. To cope up with this situation,
firstly
, parents
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
give quality of upbringing to their wards by inculcating moral values into them, and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them believe in simple living. Apart from this, mentors should
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
find the capability of their wards and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
him grow in their field of interest,
rather
than, pressurized him to opt any particular field of study.
Therefore
, by adapting these methods
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
from the budding minds.

In conclusion
, in this stressful environment,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
need the guidance of their mentors. Thereby, parents should
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
give them support and right advice to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
their future bright.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You have a permanent job and few weeks ago you have started a part time short course You are not satisfied with it and want to change this part time course Write a letter to your professor explaining why you are not satisfied with your present part time c v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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