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Essay topics: A builder worked in your house a few weeks ago. You did not like the result of his work. Write a letter to him and say. - Describe the work you wanted him to do. - What is your complaint about his job? - What do you expect him to do about it? v.1

Essay topics: A builder worked in your house a few weeks ago. You did not like the result of his work. Write a letter to him and say. - Describe the work you wanted him to do. - What is your complaint about his job? - What do you expect him to do about it? v. 1
In the urban area, the security has been improved due to the crime restriction. The measures introduced may cause the benefits and the drawbacks to the society. However, I believe that those measures possess more benefits to the urban dwellers. Living in urban areas has its own challenge for some people. The highly competitive aspects such as high cost of living leads the struggle of the poor. While trying to cope with the realities of a city life, some people may become a wrongdoer to stay alive. Therefore to prevent this, the government applies the strict rules, particularly in public areas, such as conducting security checks before entering a mall, taking measures for any suspicious activity in people and so forth. However, the rule might cause difficulties, because people cannot experience their activity freely. On the other hand, as a result of improving the security, people won't longer worry about their belongings or placing their vehicles in the parking area, because they feel safe. In addition, the parents will be more convenient to let their children outside the home. Indeed, the applied tight rules in public area constrict the wrongdoer to conduct their acts. Hence, the offenders might think twice before doing the crime. In conclusion, enhancing the security in urban area is undoubtedly leads many benefits than its drawbacks. However, the government had better not only prevent the wrongdoer to act, but also looks for its causes, considering the crime happens not because of without reason. Therefore, they will diminish the crime properly.
In the
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urban
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area
, the
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security
has been
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improved
due to the crime restriction. The measures introduced may cause the benefits and the drawbacks to the society.
However
, I believe that those measures possess more benefits to the
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urban
dwellers.

Living in
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urban
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areas
has its
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own
challenge for
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some
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people
. The
highly
competitive aspects such as high cost of living leads the struggle of the poor. While trying to cope with the realities of a city life,
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some
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people
may become a wrongdoer to stay alive.
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to
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prevent
this, the
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government
applies the strict
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rules
,
particularly
in public
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areas
, such as conducting
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security
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checks
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before
entering a mall, taking measures for any suspicious activity in
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people
and
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so
forth.
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, the
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rule
might cause difficulties,
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because
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people
cannot experience their activity
freely
.

On the other hand
,
as a result
of improving the
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security
,
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people
won't longer worry about their belongings or placing their vehicles in the parking
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area
,
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because
they feel safe.
In addition
, the parents will be more convenient to
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let
their children outside the home.
Indeed
, the applied tight
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rules
in public
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area
constrict the wrongdoer to conduct their acts.
Hence
, the offenders might
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think
twice
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before
doing the crime.

In conclusion
, enhancing the
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security
in
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urban
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area
is
undoubtedly
leads
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many
benefits than its drawbacks.
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, the
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government
had better not
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only
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prevent
the wrongdoer to act,
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but
also
looks for its causes, considering the crime happens not
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because
of without reason.
Therefore
, they will diminish the crime
properly
.
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7Mistakes

IELTS essay Essay topics: A builder worked in your house a few weeks ago. You did not like the result of his work. Write a letter to him and say. - Describe the work you wanted him to do. - What is your complaint about his job? - What do you expect him to do about it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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