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Using the points and examples from the lecture, describe the two kinds of rock formation in a cavern, and explain how the professor helps his students remember the difference between two. v.1

Using the points and examples from the lecture, describe the two kinds of rock formation in a cavern, and explain how the professor helps his students remember the difference between two. v. 1
There are a variety of perspectives about which are the crucial factors that can be used to reflect the prosperous nation. While I would agree that economic progress is a useful method to assess a country, I contend that there are several factors can evaluate a nation’s success and education systems, to certain extend, is the most important factor. Education systems and crime rate should be considered as the key factors in deciding a prosperous country. Firstly, a good education system included schools, colleges and universities has an important role to play in educating latent talents and bearing a large number of labours for nations. Secondly, crime rate should also be taken into account as the main contributor that has the positive effects on the country’ success. In other words, average crime rate indicates the adequacy of the citizen. A country with a high crime rate, it means innumerable citizens are living in poverty and the measures should be taken to alleviate and improve the people’s living standard. In my opinion, a country’s education system should be seen as the most important indicator of its prosperity and level of development. The reason for this is education has an enormous impact on both economic and crime rates. People who are living in a good educational environment are not only taught common knowledge but also have better consciousness about moral principles. Those who are well educated have a better consciousness which helps them know what is the right things to do and also seeking for a job that can help them cover the cost of living. To sum up, there are several factors that can be used to assess a country’s success, but I would contend that education plays an important role in the prosperity of a nation.
There are a variety of
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perspectives about
which are the crucial
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factors
that can be
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used
to reflect the prosperous
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nation
. While I would
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agree
that economic progress is a useful method to assess a
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country
, I contend that there are several
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factors
can evaluate a
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nation’s
success and
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education
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systems
, to certain
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extend
, is the most
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important
factor.

Education
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systems
and
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crime
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rate
should
be considered
as the key
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factors
in deciding a prosperous
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country
.
Firstly
, a
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good
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education
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system
included schools, colleges and universities has an
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important
role to play in educating latent talents and bearing
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a large number of
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labours
for
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nations
.
Secondly
,
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crime
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rate
should
also
be taken
into account as the main contributor that has the
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positive
effects on the
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country’
success.
In other words
, average
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crime
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rate
indicates the adequacy of the citizen. A
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country
with a high
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crime
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rate
, it means innumerable citizens are living in poverty and the measures should
be taken
to alleviate and
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improve
the
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people
’s living standard.

In my opinion, a
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country’s
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education
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system
should be
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seen
as the most
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important
indicator of its prosperity and level of development.
The reason for this is
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education
has an enormous impact on both economic and
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crime
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rates
.
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People
who are living in a
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good
educational environment are not
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only
taught common knowledge
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but
also
have better consciousness about moral principles. Those who are
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well educated
have a better consciousness which
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helps
them know what is the right things to do and
also
seeking for a job that can
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help
them cover the cost of living.

To sum up, there are several
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factors
that can be
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used
to assess a
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country’s
success,
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but
I would contend that
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education
plays an
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important
role in the prosperity of a
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nation
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Using the points and examples from the lecture, describe the two kinds of rock formation in a cavern, and explain how the professor helps his students remember the difference between two. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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