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You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you can not continue the course. Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter, describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take v.1

You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you can not continue the course. Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter, describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take v. 1
Dear Sir, I am a student of "Business Management" a part-time in your institute. The main endeavour of writing this letter is to inform you that I am unable to continue the course in this term due to my office work assignment. Please allow me to explain it briefly. I am doing full-time job in Infosys in city, Toronto but, recently my company has opened a new branch in Vancouver which is 200 km away from there. Due to this, my company shifted some of the employees to that location and they promoted me HR Manager there. So it is quite difficult to travel daily such long distance. Moreover, my job requires more work and time as well, therefore, I want to hold this subject for the next session. I am gathering the information, whether I can move permanently to Toronto for the future enhancement. So I will try to do my best to provide the justifications to my management to allow me to work from the current location. Somehow I wanted to complete the lectures for my carrier enhancement, so I am sure to travel back to home and join the studies again. However, my priority is to continue with my job to run my life without any interruption and concern my family too. I hope you understand my situation and I wish to join the course again in the upcoming term. So could you please adjust my current payment to the next session if possible. If it is not practicable for you then refund my money. I look forward to hear from you.
Dear Sir,

I am a student of
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"
Business Management
Use a smart closing quote here: "”".
"
a part-time in your institute.

The main
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endeavour
of writing this letter is to inform you that I am unable to continue the course in this term due to my office work assignment.
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Please
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allow
me to
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explain
it
briefly
.

I am doing full-time job in
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Infosys
in city, Toronto
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but
, recently my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
has opened a new branch in Vancouver which is 200 km away from there. Due to this, my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
shifted
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
employees to that
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
location and
they promoted me HR Manager there.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
it is quite difficult to travel daily such long distance.
Moreover
, my job requires more work and time
as well
,
therefore
, I want to hold this subject for the
next
session.

I am gathering the information, whether I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
permanently
to Toronto for the future enhancement.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
I will try to do my best to provide the justifications to my management to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me to work from the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
location. Somehow I wanted to complete the lectures for my carrier enhancement,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I am sure to travel back to home and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the studies again.

However
, my priority is to continue with my job to run my life without any interruption and concern my family too. I hope you understand my situation and I wish to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the course again in the upcoming term.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
could you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
adjust my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
payment to the
next
session if possible. If it is not practicable for you then refund my money.

I look forward
In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to hearing".
to hear
from you.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you can not continue the course. Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter, describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take v. 1

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
265 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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