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work with mistakes 18/09/2017You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to the course tutor. In your letter. Describe the situationExplain why you cannot continue a v.1

work with mistakes 18/09/2017You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to the course tutor. In your letter. Describe the situationExplain why you cannot continue a v. 1
There has been a tendency that cars that burn fossil fuels is contributing major in air pollution and due to this, the electric cars should take place of the engine combustion cars. I completely agree because electric car produces zero emission of pollutant and facilitate the saving of non-renewable fuels. Electric cars are more environmentally friendly and help to improve overall air quality. It does not involve burning of fuels such as petrol and diesel which are the main source of toxic gases such as carbon dioxide and sulphur. Although the higher number of electric cars will increase high demand of electricity production, it can be produced by using renewable energy sources such as solar energy and wind energy which generate nearly null pollution. For example, in India, the government has introduced one rule of having one electric car per house few years ago, and this resulted in a low level of overall pollution in the country. Electric cars would save fossil fuels to being extinct. Replacing traditional diesel and petrol cars with the electric cars would help to reduce human’s overall dependency on fossil fuels, and ultimately save the non-renewable fuels for future generation. Recent research, for an instant, says that if we continue to use engine combustion cars, we will be soon left out of precious fossil fuels, which required hundreds of years, and replacement of old traditional cars with car runs on electricity would be the best solution. In conclusion, I agree that fossil fuels burning cars should be replaced by electric cars because of its benefits such as less production of bad gases in the air and less dependency on rare fossil fuels.
There has been a tendency that
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cars
that burn
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fossil
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fuels
is contributing major in air pollution and due to this, the
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electric
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cars
should take place of the engine combustion
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cars
. I completely
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agree
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because
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electric
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car
produces zero emission of pollutant and facilitate the saving of non-renewable fuels.

Electric
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cars
are more
environmentally
friendly and
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help
to
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improve
overall
air quality. It does not involve burning of
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fuels
such as petrol and diesel which are the main source of toxic gases such as carbon dioxide and
Possible spelling mistake. 'sulphur' is British English.
sulphur
. Although the higher number of
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electric
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cars
will increase high demand of electricity production, it can
be produced
by using renewable energy sources such as solar energy and wind energy which generate
nearly
null pollution.
For example
, in India, the
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government
has introduced one
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rule
of having one
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electric
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car
per
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house
few years ago, and this resulted in a low level of
overall
pollution in the country.

Electric
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cars
would save
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fossil
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fuels
to being extinct. Replacing traditional diesel and petrol
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cars
with the
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electric
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cars
would
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help
to
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reduce
human’s
overall
dependency on
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fossil
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fuels
, and
ultimately
save the non-renewable
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fuels
for future generation.

Recent research, for an instant, says that if we continue to
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use
engine combustion
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cars
, we will be
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soon
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left
out of precious
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fossil
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fuels
, which required hundreds of years, and replacement of
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old
traditional
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cars
with
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car
runs on electricity would be the best solution.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
that
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fossil
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fuels
burning
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cars
should
be replaced
by
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electric
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cars
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because
of its benefits such as less production of
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bad
gases in the air and less dependency on rare
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fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay work with mistakes 18/09/2017You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to the course tutor. In your letter. Describe the situationExplain why you cannot continue a v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
277 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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