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Learning English at schools is often seen as more important than local languages. If these are not taught many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it more important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure survival of local languages and if so, how? v.1

Learning English at schools is often seen as more important than local languages. If these are not taught many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it more important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure survival of local languages and if so, how? v. 1
English being one of the most widely spoken languages in today’s world, has affected people’s day-to-day activities enormously. Due to the fact that, the entire world becoming one global village through all the technological advancements and innovations, English has become a must to effectively communicate with each other and even survive. Although it has now become essential for everyone to be fluent in English, I strongly believe that people should give priority for their mother tongue. It is evident that earlier we had quite boundaries across the globe. Lately, the invention of computers and the World Wide Web has brought the entire universe into one single platform. So it is obvious that countries are not isolated anymore. Today, people tend to make deals with others all over the world because of the advantages they get. For instance, if someone is to purchase goods, they are more likely to find the best prices and make the purchase from another country through E-commerce. What’s more, technology has brought businesses into one place where they can extend their markets in different continents. Hence, not being able to communicate in English is going to make you isolated in this rapidly growing technological era. While teaching your child the importance of English, what is more important is to make them protect and prioritize your own language. Many countries have their own language gifted by their ancestors. It is everyone’s duty to protect the language that shows the uniqueness of their nation. As I believe making kids love their country and nation is best possible way to protect countries’ unique heritages. Because a patriotic person will always give priority for their mother nation above all the foreign influence. In conclusion, it is crucial for people from all over the world to protect and maintain their culture, traditions, mother language and finally the country. Because the world will be the perfect place if the diversity is protected and respected.
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world
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affected
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people’s
day-to-day activities
enormously
. Due to the fact that, the entire
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world
becoming one global village through all the technological advancements and innovations, English has become a
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must
to
effectively
communicate with each other and even survive. Although it has
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now
become essential for everyone to be fluent in English, I
strongly
believe that
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people
should give priority for their mother tongue.

It is evident that earlier we had quite boundaries across the globe. Lately, the invention of computers and the
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World
Wide Web has brought the entire universe into one single platform.
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So
it is obvious that
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countries
are not isolated anymore.
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Today
,
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people
tend to
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make
deals with others all over the
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world
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because
of the advantages they
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get
.
For instance
, if someone is to
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purchase
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goods
, they are more likely to find the best prices and
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make
the
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purchase
from another
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country
through E-commerce. What’s more, technology has brought businesses into one place where they can extend their markets in
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different
continents.
Hence
, not being able to communicate in English is going to
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make
you isolated in this
rapidly
growing technological era.

While teaching your child the importance of English,
what is more
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important
is to
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make
them
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protect
and prioritize your
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own
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language
.
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countries
have their
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own
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language
gifted by their ancestors. It is everyone’s duty to
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protect
the
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language
that
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shows
the uniqueness of their nation. As I believe making kids
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love
their
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country
and nation
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is best
possible way to
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protect
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countries’
unique heritages.
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Because
a patriotic person will always give priority for their mother nation
above all
the foreign influence.

In conclusion
, it is crucial for
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people
from all over the
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world
to
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protect
and maintain their culture, traditions, mother
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language
and
finally
the
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country
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
the
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world
will be the perfect place if the diversity
is protected
and respected.
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29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Learning English at schools is often seen as more important than local languages. If these are not taught many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it more important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure survival of local languages and if so, how? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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