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arisPART 2describe a restaurant that you enjoyed going to, you should saywhere the restaurant waswhy you chose this restaurantwhat type of food you ate in this restaurant and explain why you enjoyed eating in this restaurant. v.1

arisPART 2describe a restaurant that you enjoyed going to, you should saywhere the restaurant waswhy you chose this restaurantwhat type of food you ate in this restaurant and explain why you enjoyed eating in this restaurant. v. 1
Economically good countries should help poorer countries which are in need of others when they are affected by natural effects. I definitely agree with this and I will explain my reasons in the following passage. Firstly, wealthy nations doesn't mean a nation with high income and well developed. Here, it means that nation with huge funds which utilise that investment in developing their country. At the same time, it also includes helping other country's to show their humanitarian when there is a need for a nation. For example, due to natural disasters such as cyclone, storm and so on. Secondly, helping nature between nations shows their mutual understanding and increase the pride of the country with helping hands. Accordingly, this also reduces interrupts between those country people. Accordingly, not only the authorities also the individuals should help other country people during their bad times. The natural calamities to a nation destroys everyone's life who belongs to that place economically and also physically. At that time, one need help of others to survive their life. For example, affected people cannot go out from their place to get food and also to work in such cases, one can help them by providing food. If its a case of tsunami people can help others save them and can move them to another place. If a country got attacked with the natural affects this gradually reduces the economic status of the nation. After having considered all the points that I have discussed above, we can finally draw a conclusion that every wealthy nation should raise their hands to help other nations which are affected by natural disasters. This also helps them to improve their nations pride and also their positive attitude towards others.
Economically
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good
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countries
should
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help
poorer
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countries
which are in need of others when they are
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affected
by
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natural
effects. I definitely
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agree
with this and I will
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explain
my reasons in the following passage.

Firstly
, wealthy
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nations
doesn't mean a
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nation
with high income and
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well developed
. Here, it means that
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nation
with huge funds which
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utilise
that investment in developing their
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country
. At the same time, it
also
includes helping
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other
country's to
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show
their humanitarian when there is a need for a
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nation
.
For example
, due to
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natural
disasters such as cyclone, storm and
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so
on.
Secondly
, helping nature between
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nations
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shows
their mutual understanding and increase the pride of the
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country
with helping hands.
Accordingly
, this
also
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reduces
interrupts between those
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country
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people
.

Accordingly
, not
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only
the authorities
also
the individuals should
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help
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other
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country
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people
during their
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bad
times. The
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natural
calamities to a
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nation
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destroys
everyone's life who belongs to that place
economically
and
also
physically
. At that time, one need
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help
of others to survive their life.
For example
,
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affected
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people
cannot go out from their place to
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get
food and
also
to work in such cases, one can
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help
them by providing food. If
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its
a case of tsunami
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people
can
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help
others save them and can
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move
them to another place.
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If
a
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country
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got
attacked with the
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natural
affects this
gradually
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reduces
the economic status of the nation.

After having considered all the points that I have discussed above, we can
finally
draw a conclusion that every wealthy
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nation
should raise their hands to
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help
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other
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nations
which are
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affected
by
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natural
disasters. This
also
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helps
them to
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improve
their
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nations
pride and
also
their
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positive
attitude towards others.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay arisPART 2describe a restaurant that you enjoyed going to, you should saywhere the restaurant waswhy you chose this restaurantwhat type of food you ate in this restaurant and explain why you enjoyed eating in this restaurant. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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