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You got to know about a certain position that interests you at an information session conducted for college students. You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the firm. In your letterintroduce yourselftalk about what special skill v.1

You got to know about a certain position that interests you at an information session conducted for college students. You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the firm. In your letterintroduce yourselftalk about what special skill v. 1
Although it is believed by some that the best place for a child to grow is in an urban area, some claim that growing up in a rural area is more suitable. This essay will discuss the positive and negative sides of both locations. There are both benefits and drawbacks of children living in big cities. One of such rewards for growing up in commercial centres is the availability of improved public facilities. In other words, children get the best opportunity to go to better schools, libraries and also to make use of good hospitals. Daily Times Newspaper, for example, reported that Lagos, one of the fastest growing cities in Nigeria, has over 200 best schools in the country. In contrast, one of the challenges faced by children growing up in big towns is the frequent traffic congestion. Due to the increase in population in these areas, and the large number of cars on the road, children may find it difficult moving to school every morning. Thus, it is important to consider the consequences of living in large cities before moving in with your kids. On the other hand, there are equally the good and the bad sides of living in small settlement areas. One of the exciting aspect of living in the village is the experience of living in a peaceful environment. This is because the population of people in such areas is small compared to large areas. However, children who graduate from the university can not find the right employment. This is as a result of the little or no industries in small communities. For instance, Vanguard Newspaper reported that there are only 10 companies in India's poor localities and so students who finish from school in India each year become jobless. This shows that there are strengths and weaknesses of growing up in a remote area. In conclusion, there are both good and bad sides of children living in large and small settlement areas. It is advised that families must weigh the two sides before making any move.
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some
that the best place for a child to grow is in an urban
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area
,
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some
claim that
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growing
up in a rural
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area
is more suitable. This essay will discuss the
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positive
and
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negative
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sides
of both locations.

There are both benefits and drawbacks of
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children
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living
in
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big
cities. One of such rewards for
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growing
up in commercial
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centres
is the availability of
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improved
public facilities.
In other words
,
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children
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get
the best opportunity to go to better
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schools
, libraries and
also
to
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make
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use
of
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good
hospitals. Daily Times Newspaper,
for example
, reported that Lagos, one of the fastest
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growing
cities in Nigeria, has over 200 best
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schools
in the country.
In contrast
, one of the challenges faced by
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children
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growing
up in
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big
towns is the frequent traffic congestion. Due to the increase in population in these
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areas
, and the
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large
number of cars on the road,
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children
may find it difficult moving to
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school
every morning.
Thus
, it is
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important
to consider the consequences of
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living
in
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large
cities
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before
moving in with your kids.

On the other hand
, there are
equally
the
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good
and the
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bad
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sides
of
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living
in
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small
settlement
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areas
. One of the exciting aspect of
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living
in the village is the experience of
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living
in a peaceful environment. This is
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because
the population of
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people
in such
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areas
is
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small
compared to
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large
areas.

However
,
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children
who graduate from the university can not find the right employment. This is
as a result
of the
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little
or no industries in
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small
communities.
For instance
, Vanguard Newspaper reported that there are
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only
10
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companies
in India's poor localities and
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so
students who finish from
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school
in India each year become jobless. This
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shows
that there are strengths and weaknesses of
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growing
up in a remote area.

In conclusion
, there are both
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good
and
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bad
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sides
of
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children
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living
in
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large
and
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small
settlement
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areas
. It
is advised
that families
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must
weigh the two
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sides
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before
making any
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move
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You got to know about a certain position that interests you at an information session conducted for college students. You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the firm. In your letterintroduce yourselftalk about what special skill v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
341 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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