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You work a part-time job in a company, and the company posted an advert seeking a person for a full-time position. Write a letter to your manager requesting to apply for the advertised position. In your letter say– Why do you want to apply? – What are v.2

You work a part-time job in a company, and the company posted an advert seeking a person for a full-time position. Write a letter to your manager requesting to apply for the advertised position. In your letter say– Why do you want to apply? – What are v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter regarding the full-time position of Business development executive that I have recently seen in an advertisement. I have been working with your company for 11 months now and I was doing a bachelor' s degree in business administration and I have just finished it last month. Thus, I am able to work full time and I will be adequate for this position because I have gained vast experience by working here under Mr. John kelly. I am planning to do a master' s degree in business and marketing next semester, which will not affect my current working schedule because I can attend classes on weekends. Additionally, I would strive to achieve a higher position in the organization. I have learned several skills in marketing while working here so my experience and studies in the relevant field can help in the overall development of the company. Moreover, I can advise in marketing strategies to increase the sales of the organization. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Priyanka Tuli
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter regarding the full-time position of Business development executive that I have recently
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seen
in an advertisement.

I have been
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working
with your
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company
for 11 months
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now and
I was doing a
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bachelor&
#039; s degree in business administration and I have
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just
finished it last month.
Thus
, I am able to work full time and I will be adequate for this position
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because
I have gained vast experience by
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working
here under Mr. John
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kelly
.

I am planning to do a
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master&
#039; s degree in business and marketing
next
semester, which will not affect my
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current
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working
schedule
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because
I can attend classes on weekends.
Additionally
, I would strive to achieve a higher position in the organization.

I have learned several
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
in marketing while
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
here
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
my experience and studies in the relevant field can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in the
overall
development of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.
Moreover
, I can advise in marketing strategies to increase the sales of the organization.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
Faithfully
,

Priyanka
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Tuli
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay You work a part-time job in a company, and the company posted an advert seeking a person for a full-time position. Write a letter to your manager requesting to apply for the advertised position. In your letter say– Why do you want to apply? – What are v. 2

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
176 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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