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TPO Extra1 People learn things better from those at their own level such as fellow students or co workers than from those at a higher level such as teachers or supervisors v.1

TPO Extra1 People learn things better from those at their own level such as fellow students or co workers than from those at a higher level such as teachers or supervisors v. 1
Some people argue that the use of technology is not going to take over traditional scholar books in education institutions. This essay is going to explain why people think this and show why they are wrong. The unique experience of handling a book can be the main reason why it is believed that the internet will never success in replacing traditional methods of learning. For some people who have grown up reading books, for example, it can be impossible to enjoy and acquire any knowledge from reading in gadgets such as tablets and computers because they are not accustomed to do this. Their learning process is connected to what they lived through their lives. It is extremely difficult to old generation deal with novelty. However, the use of the internet instead of books has already started in some schools. For instance, Australians primary and secondary students are no longer using books. They are using tablets and portable computers not only at school, but also at home to do their homework and communicate with their teachers. The educational development of this young people has had impressive results because the students are familiar with the tools they are handling. In addition, their brains have already adapted to this technology, which they were risen with. To conclude, I totally disagree that the internet will never replace books at school since this is already a reality in many developed countries. Furthermore, the use of technology has had a positive impact on the education of young generation.
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of technology is not going to take over traditional scholar
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books
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why they are
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.

The unique experience of handling a
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book
can be the main reason why it
is believed
that the internet will never success in replacing traditional methods of learning. For
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some
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people
who have grown up reading
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books
,
for example
, it can be impossible to enjoy and acquire any knowledge from reading in gadgets such as tablets and computers
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because
they are not accustomed to do this. Their learning process
is connected
to what they
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lived
through their
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lives
. It is
extremely
difficult to
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old
generation deal with novelty.

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, the
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use
of the internet
instead
of
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books
has already
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started
in
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some
schools.
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, Australians primary and secondary students are no longer using
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books
. They are using tablets and portable computers not
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only
at school,
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also
at home to do their homework and communicate with their teachers. The educational development of this young
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people
has had impressive results
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because
the students are familiar with the tools they are handling.
In addition
, their brains have already adapted to this technology, which they
were risen
with.

To conclude
, I
totally
disagree that the internet will never replace
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books
at school since this is already a reality in
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many
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developed countries
.
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, the
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use
of technology has had a
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positive
impact on the education of young generation.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay TPO Extra1 People learn things better from those at their own level such as fellow students or co workers than from those at a higher level such as teachers or supervisors v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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