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Some people find history a fascinating subject. other say it is dull and has no place in modern life. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people find history a fascinating subject. other say it is dull and has no place in modern life. v. 2
History has important place in our society, country and nation and some people find it very interesting. Some persons believe that it has nothing to do with modern life-style and consider history as lackluster. I shall discuss both views and opiate the same. People who like history see various reasons of considering it important. First of all, history links to individual, society and nation and it depicts that how the things evolved during course of period. Many people find it curious to know how their forefathers lived and what changes were done since their time. Secondly, history also gives an opportunity to learn from past. People fought it in ancient time and millions of life lost during war. At least people can learn that only solution of any problem is peace talks. For example, after fighting world war-II, Germany and United Kingdom agreed to resolve any problem through talks or compromise. On the other side, people believe that moving forward is way of life and nothing much can be done about past. Therefore, it has no linkage with modern life. It is seen that young people are ambitious and go getter and do not want to remorse about past mistakes or past events. Having this attitude disincline them from history. Furthermore, modern technology is changing so rapidly that it has no resemblance with life decade ago or more. For instance, kids find it difficult to perceive life without internet or mobile in past. To sum-up, though history gives impression about evolution of life, people find no real linkage with modern time and do not give weightage. I believe that future is important and modern life must embrace it but history should not be forgotten as it gives valuable learning and facts.
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History
has
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important
place in our society, country and nation and
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some
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people
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find
it
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very
interesting.
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Some
persons believe that it has nothing to do with
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modern
life-style and consider
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history
as lackluster. I shall discuss both views and opiate the same.

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People
who like
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history
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see
various reasons of considering it
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important
.
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First of all
,
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history
links to individual, society and nation and it depicts that how the things evolved during course of period.
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Many
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people
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find
it curious to know how their forefathers
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lived
and what
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changes
were done
since their time.
Secondly
,
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history
also
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gives
an opportunity to learn from
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past
.
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People
fought it in ancient time and millions of
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life
lost during war. At least
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people
can learn that
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only
solution of any problem is peace talks.
For example
, after fighting world war-II, Germany and United Kingdom
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agreed
to resolve any problem through talks or compromise.

On the other side,
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people
believe that moving forward is way of
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life
and nothing much can
be done
about
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past
.
Therefore
, it has no linkage with
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modern
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life
. It is
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seen
that young
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people
are ambitious and go getter and do not want to remorse about
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past
mistakes or
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past
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events
. Having this attitude disincline them from
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history
.
Furthermore
,
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modern
technology is changing
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so
rapidly
that it has no resemblance with
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life
decade ago or more.
For instance
, kids
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find
it difficult to perceive
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life
without internet or mobile
Did you mean: "in the past"?
in past
.

To sum-up, though
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history
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gives
impression about evolution of
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life
,
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people
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find
no real linkage with
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modern
time and do not
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give
weightage. I believe that future is
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important
and
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modern
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life
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must
embrace it
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but
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history
should not
be forgotten
as it
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gives
valuable learning and facts.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people find history a fascinating subject. other say it is dull and has no place in modern life. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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