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You are writing your first letter to a pen pal. Describe your previous studies and work experience, your current activities, hobbies and interests. Tell your pen pal that you will be visiting him/her v.1

You are writing your first letter to a pen pal. Describe your previous studies and work experience, your current activities, hobbies and interests. Tell your pen pal that you will be visiting him/her v. 1
It is difficult to understand lessons entirely at an institution without sufficient practise. Tutors expect their pupils to complete their assignments and coursework at the house daily in order redo and revise what they learnt at the institute. Also student only spends a limited amount of time at the academy and it is not possible to do both curriculum and exercise at the academy. Firstly, The main expectation of homeworks are for practice and revise lessons at home. Students may not understand everything during the subject period. Thus, teachers majorly cover topics and explaining methods, they will not provide enough exercise to revise at classroom. For instance, a maths teacher can only teach algebra methods with few examples which may not clear all doubts. Therefore, learners must do practise similar sums and different methods at the house. On the other hand, Students spend only limited hours at the institute and it is impossible to expect both lessons and exercise at classroom. To illustrate, the school time is only bounded to 8 hours and furthermore each period last long only 40 to 45 minutes. In fact, it is hard for teachers to educate completely new topics within 45 minutes without having any doubts. Children stay more time at home compare to an institution and they can do revision when they are free. In conclusion, For learners, homeworks are very important to practise and revise the lessons. Also, they spend only one third of the day at school and it is highly helpful to do explanation at school and homeworks and revisions at home to clear doubts and problems.
It is difficult to understand
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lessons
entirely
at an institution without sufficient
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practise
. Tutors
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
their pupils to complete their assignments and coursework at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
daily in order redo and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
revise
what they
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learnt at
the institute.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Also
student
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only
spends a limited amount of time at the academy and it is not possible to do both curriculum and exercise at the academy.

Firstly
, The main expectation of
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homeworks
are for practice and
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revise
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lessons
at home. Students may not understand everything during the subject period.
Thus
, teachers
majorly
cover topics and explaining methods, they will not provide
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
exercise to
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revise
at classroom.
For instance
, a
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "maths'" or "math's"?
maths
teacher can
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only
teach algebra methods with few examples which may not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
all doubts.
Therefore
, learners
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must
do
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practise
similar sums and
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different
methods at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.

On the other hand
, Students spend
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only
limited hours at the institute and it is impossible to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
both
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lessons
and exercise at classroom. To illustrate, the school time is
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only
bounded to 8 hours and
furthermore
each period last long
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
40 to 45 minutes. In fact, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
for teachers to educate completely new topics within 45 minutes without having any doubts. Children stay more time at home compare to an
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
institution and
they can do revision when they are free.

In conclusion
, For learners,
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homeworks
are
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very
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important
to
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practise
and
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revise
the
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lessons
.
Also
, they spend
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only
one third of the day at school and it is
highly
helpful to do explanation at school and
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homeworks
and revisions at home to
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clear
doubts and problems.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You are writing your first letter to a pen pal. Describe your previous studies and work experience, your current activities, hobbies and interests. Tell your pen pal that you will be visiting him/her v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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