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One of your pen pals will shortly be visiting your city. For some reasons, you can not manage to meet him at the airport on time. Write a letter asking him to wait for you at the airport and tell him how to identify you. v.1

One of your pen pals will shortly be visiting your city. For some reasons, you can not manage to meet him at the airport on time. Write a letter asking him to wait for you at the airport and tell him how to identify you. v. 1
Owing to the problems which a growing population of overweight people causes of the health care system, some people think that the key to solving these issues is to have more sport and exercise in schools. In my opinion, I completely agree that this is the best way to tackle the issue of deteriorating public fitness in relation to weight. Firstly, dealing with the issues surrounding obesity and weight problems is best solved by taking a long term approach and introducing more athletics and exercise in schools. This method will ensure that the next generation will be healthier and will not have such health problems. At the moment, the average child in the West does athletics possibly twice a week, which is not enough to counteract their otherwise sedentary lifestyle. However, by incorporating more sports classes into the curriculum as well as encouraging extracurricular sports activities, they will undoubtedly become fitter and more active. Another point to consider is that having more sports lessons for children in schools will probably result in children developing an interest in exercise which might filter through to other members of their family and have a longer lasting effect. In other words, parents with sporty children are more likely to get involved in athletics as a way of encouraging their children. By both parents and children being involved, it will ensure that children grow up to incorporate sport into their daily lives. This is certainly a natural and lasting way to improve public well-being. In conclusion, to deal with an increasing population of unfit, overweight people, changing the lifestyle of the coming generation by introducing sports in schools is the easiest and most effective method to use.
Owing to the problems which a growing population of overweight
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people
causes of the health care system,
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some
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people
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think
that the key to solving these issues is to have more
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sport
and exercise in
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schools
. In my opinion, I completely
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agree
that this is the best way to tackle the issue of deteriorating public fitness in relation to weight.

Firstly
, dealing with the issues surrounding obesity and weight problems is best solved by taking a long term approach and introducing more athletics and exercise in
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schools
. This method will ensure that the
next
generation will be healthier and will not have such health problems. At the moment, the average child in the West does athletics
possibly
twice a week, which is not
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enough
to counteract their
otherwise
sedentary lifestyle.
However
, by incorporating more
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sports
classes into the curriculum
as well
as encouraging extracurricular
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sports
activities, they will
undoubtedly
become fitter and more active.

Another point to consider is that having more
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sports
lessons for
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children
in
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schools
will
probably
result in
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children
developing an interest in exercise which might filter through to other members of their family and have a longer lasting effect.
In other words
, parents with sporty
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children
are more likely to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
involved in athletics as a way of encouraging their
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children
. By both parents and
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children
being involved
, it will ensure that
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children
grow up to incorporate
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sport
into their daily
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lives
. This is
certainly
a natural and lasting way to
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improve
public well-being.

In conclusion
, to deal with an increasing population of unfit, overweight
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people
, changing the lifestyle of the coming generation by introducing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
in
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schools
is the easiest and most effective method to
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use
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay One of your pen pals will shortly be visiting your city. For some reasons, you can not manage to meet him at the airport on time. Write a letter asking him to wait for you at the airport and tell him how to identify you. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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