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You are working in a international company. You want to quit your this job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, you should say: Why you want to quitWhen you want to leaveWhat you liked about the company. v.1

You are working in a international company. You want to quit your this job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, you should say: Why you want to quitWhen you want to leaveWhat you liked about the company. v. 1
Education is a necessary aspect to for the world to continue developing. However, university tuition costs are extremely costly and not all have the sufficient amount. Likewise, some believe that universities should reduce the fees to zero for everyone. While decreasing the value of the tuition fees is not only beneficial, it will also provide a reasonable solution and this essay will explain why I completely agree with this opinion. There are many people who come from rural areas often cannot afford the high cost that university provide, consequently, they are stripped from education. The first reason is offering everyone an equal chance, in other words, anyone can study and increasing the number of people benefiting the system. For instance, students from disadvantaged backgrounds will have the same education as those who are moneyed. Therefore, unlimiting the access of knowledge and grant all the benefits of it. Secondly, reducing the cost will allow a long-term solution, which is increasing more job opportunities. How does this benefit the sociality? If education is provided for everyone, that means more people becoming doctors, lawyers, and polices. As a result, unemployment will significantly decrease and solve an obvious solution. For example, a research shows that 30 percent of jobs are facing a problem of employment shortage due to not enough graduates. Furthermore, the economy will be improved as more of the population contribute the sociality. To conclude, this provides an equal chance for everyone to receive knowledge, as well as offering more job opportunities. Hence, I think university education should be zero cost, offering everyone a more affordable environment.
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Education
is a necessary aspect to for the world to continue developing.
However
,
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university
tuition
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costs
are
extremely
costly and not all have the sufficient amount.
Likewise
,
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some
believe that
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universities
should
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reduce
the fees to zero for
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everyone
. While decreasing the value of the tuition fees is not
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only
beneficial, it will
also
provide a reasonable solution and this essay will
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explain
why I completely
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agree
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many
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people
who
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come
from rural areas
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often
cannot afford the high
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cost
that
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university
provide,
consequently
, they
are stripped
from
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education
. The
first
reason is offering
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everyone
an equal chance,
in other words
, anyone can study and increasing the number of
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people
benefiting the system.
For instance
, students from disadvantaged backgrounds will have the same
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education
as those who
are moneyed
.
Therefore
,
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unlimiting
the access of knowledge and grant all the benefits of it.

Secondly
, reducing the
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cost
will
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allow
a long-term solution, which is increasing more job opportunities. How does this benefit the
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sociality
? If
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education
is provided
for
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everyone
, that means more
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people
becoming doctors, lawyers, and polices.
As a result
, unemployment will
significantly
decrease and solve an obvious solution.
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,
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shows
that 30 percent of jobs are facing a problem of employment shortage due to not
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enough
graduates.
Furthermore
, the economy will be
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improved
as more of the population contribute the
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sociality
.

To conclude
, this provides an equal chance for
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everyone
to receive knowledge,
as well
as offering more job opportunities.
Hence
, I
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think
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university
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education
should be zero
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cost
, offering
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everyone
a more affordable environment.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You are working in a international company. You want to quit your this job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, you should say: Why you want to quitWhen you want to leaveWhat you liked about the company. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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