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You and your friend booked a theater tickets in advance. Apology to your friend as you can't make it to the theater with him. In the letter, you should: apologiesexplain what reasons you can’t make itgive options what can be done with the ticket. v.1

You and your friend booked a theater tickets in advance. Apology to your friend as you can't make it to the theater with him. In the letter, you should: apologiesexplain what reasons you can’t make itgive options what can be done with the ticket. v. 1
Tourism is a business, which is flourishing in many parts of the world. It has got its own advantages and disadvantages and just like many other human activities, tourism also has its share of environmental pollution. It should be noted that, there are many places, where local people completely depends on tourism and hence, it might not be a good idea to completely ban tourist inflow in those areas. Firstly, Too much of anything is harmful and on top of that, when tourists become ignorant of basic mannerism, it starts to affect the environment. For example, last year, the number of tourists on Himalaya expedition, were much higher than any other previous years. We all know what happens next. They left behind plastics and their other belongings, which they couldn’t carry up or down. This even included non-biodegradable materials. Aforementioned took a toll on the mountains and several mishaps happened. However, completely banning tourism at some places might not be a good idea, because, there are many people, especially in remote areas, who completely depend on tourism, for their daily food and living expenses. We can take an example of Sikkim, in India, where we can see thousands of tourists visiting the place every year. To support them, the number of Homestays, hotels, food and lodging centres and even tourist cars are increasing, and these are driven by local people. Tourism has become their job and if the ban is regulated, economy in such areas will collapse. There are many places, where the number of tourists has been regulated, what they can or can’t carry has been clearly stated and regular checkups are carried out. Hefty fines have been imposed on tourists, who violate rules and hamper the environment. For instance, I went to an island in the Andaman, which is full or corals. To save the place from tourists’ unruliness, Government of Andaman, imposed strict rules not to carry any plastic items and heavy fines was imposed on tourists, who littered. Surprisingly, nobody violated the rules and the place was clean. Finally, in my opinion, instead of completely banning tourism, I feel rules should be imposed on endangered areas. This would not only ensure least environmental damage, but also, steady income for local people. We will be able to maintain both ways by this.
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advantages and disadvantages and
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be noted
that, there are
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places
, where local
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inflow in those areas.

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, when
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tourists
become ignorant of basic mannerism, it
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starts
to affect the environment.
For example
, last year, the number of
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tourists
on Himalaya expedition, were much higher than any other previous years. We all know what happens
next
. They
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left
behind plastics and their other belongings, which they couldn’t carry up or down. This even included non-biodegradable materials. Aforementioned took a toll on the mountains and several mishaps happened.

However
,
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completely
banning
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tourism
at
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might not be a
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because
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,
especially
in remote areas, who
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completely
depend on
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tourism
, for their daily food and living expenses. We can take an example of Sikkim, in India, where we can
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thousands of
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tourists
visiting the
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every year. To support them, the number of Homestays, hotels, food and lodging
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centres
and even
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tourist
cars are increasing, and these
are driven
by local
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people
.
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has become their job and if the ban
is regulated
, economy in such areas will collapse.

There are
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many
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places
, where the number of
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tourists
has
been regulated
, what they can or can’t carry has been
clearly
stated and regular checkups
are carried
out. Hefty fines have been
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imposed
on
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tourists
, who violate
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rules
and hamper the environment.
For instance
, I went to an island in the Andaman, which is full or corals. To save the
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place
from
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tourists’
unruliness,
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Government
of Andaman,
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imposed
strict
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rules
not to carry any plastic items and heavy fines was
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on
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tourists
, who littered.
Surprisingly
, nobody violated the
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rules
and the
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place
was clean.

Finally
, in my opinion,
instead
of
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completely
banning
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tourism
, I feel
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rules
should be
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imposed
on endangered areas. This would not
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only
ensure
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least
environmental damage,
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also
, steady income for local
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people
. We will be able to maintain both ways by this.
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IELTS essay You and your friend booked a theater tickets in advance. Apology to your friend as you can't make it to the theater with him. In the letter, you should: apologiesexplain what reasons you can’t make itgive options what can be done with the ticket. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
385 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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