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You are unhappy about a plan to make you local airport bigger and increase number of flights You live near the airport Write a letter to your local newspaper In your letter explain where you live describe the problem give the reason why you do not want th v.1

You are unhappy about a plan to make you local airport bigger and increase number of flights You live near the airport Write a letter to your local newspaper In your letter explain where you live describe the problem give the reason why you do not want th v. 1
There is no doubt that, media plays a key role in shaping people's perceptions. Some people believe, media houses should focus more on positive news, but others argue that, they should maintain their neutrality and report the ground level realities. I completely agree with the latter argument and put forth my views with suitable examples. Firstly, media is a mirror to our society, hence it is their responsibility to report news that reflects the current realities. For Example, when reporting about a government's performance, media should, not just focus on the positives, but also cover their negatives, and the areas of improvement. This way, people will be able to make an informed decision during the election. I am not against reporting good news, but it should not be at the cost of the real concerns of the people. Secondly, Media should act as a liaison between the government and its citizens. For instance, in Egypt, during the Arab uprising in 2012, media played a key role to bring out the concerns of the people, to the outside world, this ultimately led to the corrupt government in Egypt. But Nowadays, in many countries media outlets, in order to increase their TRP rating, focus on positive new rather than on the concerns of their citizens. To sum up, I believe, it's important we protect the neutrality of Media. I am not against media reporting good news, but it should not be for increasing their TRP rating. Ultimately, the media is accountable to its viewers and it should represent the voice of the citizen.
There is no doubt that,
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media
plays a key role in shaping
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people
's perceptions.
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Some
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people
believe,
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media
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houses
should focus more on
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positive
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news
,
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but
others argue that, they should maintain their neutrality and report the ground level realities. I completely
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agree
with the latter argument and put forth my views with suitable examples.

Firstly
,
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media
is a mirror to our society,
hence
it is their responsibility to report
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news
that reflects the
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current
realities.
For Example
, when reporting about a
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government
's performance,
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media
should, not
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just
focus on the positives,
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but
also
cover their negatives, and the areas of improvement. This way,
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people
will be able to
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make
an informed decision during the election. I am not against reporting
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good
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news
,
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but
it should not be at the cost of the real concerns of the
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people
.

Secondly
,
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Media
should act as a liaison between the
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government
and its citizens.
For instance
, in Egypt, during the Arab uprising in 2012,
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media
played a key role to bring out the concerns of the
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people
, to the outside world, this
ultimately
led to the corrupt
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government
in Egypt.
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But
Nowadays, in
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many
countries
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media
outlets, in order to increase their TRP rating, focus on
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positive
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new
rather
than on the concerns of their citizens.

To sum up, I believe, it's
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important
we protect the neutrality of
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Media
. I am not against
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media
reporting
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good
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news
,
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but
it should not be for increasing their TRP rating.
Ultimately
, the
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media
is accountable to its viewers and it should represent the voice of the citizen.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You are unhappy about a plan to make you local airport bigger and increase number of flights You live near the airport Write a letter to your local newspaper In your letter explain where you live describe the problem give the reason why you do not want th v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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