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You are unhappy about a plan to make your local airport bigger and increase the number offlights. You live near the airport. Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter• explain where you live• describe the problem• give reasons why you do v.1

You are unhappy about a plan to make your local airport bigger and increase the number offlights. You live near the airport. Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter• explain where you live• describe the problem• give reasons why you do v. 1
Fossil fuel has a significant role in the economy and the geopolitics of our world today. Therefore, many argue that modern societies cannot abandon coal, petrol and gas as energy sources. Nevertheless, I believe that fossil fuel should no longer be utilised as a source of power due to its damaging effect on the environment and the climate. Recent scientific research has proved the connection between the current climate crisis and the excessive utilisation of fossil fuel. Burning of fossil fuel to generate power releases carbon dioxide and other greenhouse gases into the atmosphere. Which in turn trap heat and increase the temperature on our planet, causing global warming and climate change. For instance, in recent years, summer has become hotter than they used to be. In fact, the temperature in Europe reached an unprecedented level last summer. Moreover, extreme weather has become more frequent than ever before, with rainfall causing flooding and hurricanes in many regions in the world. For example, a recent flood in India killed more than 100 people and destroyed hundreds of homes. Today, there is no doubt about the association between the burning of fossil fuel and climate crisis. Accordingly, mining and drilling of fossil fuel should stop and more sustainable sources of power should be adopted. On the other hand, the argument that ending oil and gas utilisation would collapse the oil industry and harm the economy is not really accurate. Moving to clean and renewable energy such as solar and wind energy will create a new industry and encourage the development of new technologies. Adaptation of sustainable energy shouldn’t be sudden, but gradual to allow for the development of new industries. This can be proved already by many countries that have succeeded in eliminating a large percentage of fossil fuel usage and implemented renewable technologies. For instance, Germany generates 60% of its electricity from solar power. Similarly, Scotland uses wind turbines to provide electricity to most of its residents. Adopting sustainable energy will enhance the economy rather than destroy it. To conclude, I truly believe that the world should move away from fossil fuel, due to its harmful effect on the environment and its detrimental impact on the climate.
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Fossil
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fuel
has a significant role in the economy and the geopolitics of our world
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today
.
Therefore
,
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many
argue that modern societies cannot abandon coal, petrol and gas as
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energy
sources.
Nevertheless
, I believe that
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fossil
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fuel
should no longer be
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utilised
as a source of
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power
due to its damaging effect on the environment and the climate.

Recent scientific research has proved the
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connection between
the
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current
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climate
crisis and the excessive
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utilisation
of
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fossil
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fuel
. Burning of
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fossil
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fuel
to generate
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power
releases carbon dioxide and other greenhouse gases into the atmosphere. Which in turn trap heat and increase the temperature on our planet, causing global warming and
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climate
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change
.
For instance
, in recent years, summer has become hotter than they
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used
to be. In fact, the temperature in Europe reached an unprecedented level last summer.
Moreover
, extreme weather has become more frequent than ever
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before
, with rainfall causing flooding and hurricanes in
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many
regions in the world.
For example
, a recent flood in India killed more than 100
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people
and
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destroyed
hundreds of homes.
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Today
, there is no doubt about the association between the burning of
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fossil
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fuel
and
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climate
crisis.
Accordingly
, mining and drilling of
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fossil
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fuel
should
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stop
and more sustainable sources of
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power
should
be adopted
.

On the other hand
, the argument that ending oil and gas
Possible spelling mistake. 'utilisation' is British English.
utilisation
would collapse the oil industry and harm the economy is not
really
accurate. Moving to clean and renewable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
such as solar and wind
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
will create a new industry and encourage the development of new technologies. Adaptation of sustainable
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energy
shouldn’t be sudden,
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but
gradual to
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allow
for the development of new industries. This can
be proved
already by
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many
countries that have succeeded in eliminating a large percentage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
usage and implemented renewable technologies.
For instance
, Germany generates 60% of its electricity from solar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
power
.
Similarly
, Scotland
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
uses
wind turbines to provide electricity to most of its residents. Adopting sustainable
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energy
will enhance the economy
rather
than
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destroy
it.

To conclude
, I
truly
believe that the world should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
away from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
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fuel
, due to its harmful effect on the environment and its detrimental impact on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
climate
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You are unhappy about a plan to make your local airport bigger and increase the number offlights. You live near the airport. Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter• explain where you live• describe the problem• give reasons why you do v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
366 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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