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You have recently moved to a new flat Unfortunately you lost some money the other day and can not afford to pay next month s rent which is due Write a letter to the landlord explaining the situation and that you will pay as soon as your parents send the m v.1

You have recently moved to a new flat Unfortunately you lost some money the other day and can not afford to pay next month s rent which is due Write a letter to the landlord explaining the situation and that you will pay as soon as your parents send the m v. 1
Income and equality is an issue that has plagued civilization since the beginning of time. Whereas some societies strongly disagree with ‘every man for himself’ others believe in helping their neighbours. The following essay will cover European approaches using real world examples to support arguments. Wealth distribution for social ends such as health care and education is seen as a basic societal right in Denmark. There are also tremendous benefits for levelling the playing field (Nash’s equilibrium win-win situation). For example, a recent study by the University of Copenhagen showed that when the rich were forced into sharing their income amongst the economically challenged, over 70% of the wealthy reported feeling a higher sense of wellbeing afterwards. Therefore, although it is undoubtedly contentious, there are tremendous benefits for rich and poor alike to participate in wealth sharing endeavours. Secondly, evidence from history shows that laying the responsibility with the poor to improve their lot is clearly an erroneous policy. In most humanitarian governmental bodies, scientific reports have proved countless times that the initiative must start with external assistance. For instance, a pilot study showed that when poverty stricken individuals were motivated by not just be themselves that is external mentors, they had a success rate three times more than self motivated candidates. Thus, experts generally agree that the most effective humanitarian assistance involves helping one to help themselves, which underscores the common expression ‘no man's island’. To conclude, it is clear when the rich share their wealth -albeit under duress- they stand to benefit. Furthermore, when the poor gain direct support the help has a multiplier effect, therefore both actions should be strongly encouraged.
Income and equality is an issue that has plagued civilization since the beginning of time. Whereas
some
societies
strongly
disagree with ‘every
man
for himself’ others believe in helping their
neighbours
. The following essay will cover European approaches using real world examples to support arguments.

Wealth distribution for social ends such as health care and education is
seen
as a basic societal right in Denmark. There are
also
tremendous benefits for levelling the playing field (Nash’s equilibrium win-win situation).
For example
, a recent study by the University of Copenhagen
showed
that when the rich
were forced
into sharing their income amongst the
economically
challenged, over 70% of the wealthy reported feeling a higher sense of
wellbeing
afterwards.
Therefore
, although it is
undoubtedly
contentious, there are tremendous benefits for rich and poor alike to participate in wealth sharing
endeavours
.

Secondly
, evidence from history
shows
that laying the responsibility with the poor to
improve
their lot is
clearly
an erroneous policy. In most humanitarian governmental bodies, scientific reports have proved countless times that the initiative
must
start
with external assistance.

For instance
, a pilot study
showed
that when
poverty stricken
individuals
were motivated
by not
just
be themselves
that is
external mentors, they had a success rate three times more than
self motivated
candidates.
Thus
, experts
generally
agree
that the most effective humanitarian assistance involves helping one to
help
themselves, which underscores the common expression ‘no
man
's island’.

To conclude
, it is
clear
when the rich share their wealth -albeit under duress- they stand to benefit.
Furthermore
, when the poor gain direct support the
help
has a multiplier effect,
therefore
both actions should be
strongly
encouraged.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You have recently moved to a new flat Unfortunately you lost some money the other day and can not afford to pay next month s rent which is due Write a letter to the landlord explaining the situation and that you will pay as soon as your parents send the m v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
274 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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