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Talk about a special opportunity that was given to you. Explain why the opportunity was important. (TOEFL iBT 1st Question of Speaking Section) v.1

Talk about a special opportunity that was given to you. Explain why the opportunity was important. (TOEFL iBT 1st Question of Speaking Section) v. 1
In recent years, uniforms play a vital role in the organizations, so certain masses believe that companies should make their workers come in specific dress code on duty. Although it helps in recognizing the employees and improves their safety at work, it not only reduces the freedom of workers, but also increases the financial burden on the organizations. To commence with, when employees wear a uniform while working, it could benefit the company because wearing the uniform helps in identifying the workers working at different levels in the organization. As a result, they can be easily recognized. Moreover, it enhances the safety of the workers as these dresses are specifically designed for the nature of work. Thus, if any accident occurs, it might save the workers from major injuries. For example, Swaraj makes mechanical components, and it allocated specific colour dresses, such as white, yellow and green to their supervisors, workers and managers respectively. Also, these dresses are made from 90 percent nylon, which protects them from excessive heat and mechanical impact. Therefore, uniform plays a significant role for workers as well as organizations. On the other hand, the major drawback of making uniforms mandatory is that the employees might lose their freedom because they cannot wear their favourite clothing and accessories associated with it. Furthermore, if an organization regulates a dress code, then it could increase the financial burden on it because this process of distributing dresses can cost a lot to the company. For instance, in a recent survey conducted by The Tribune, it is found that the companies in which workers wear specific dresses; there is an increase of 20 percent in the expenses. Hence, it affects the company not only financially but also reduces employees’ satisfaction. To summarize, while, uniforms give identity to the workers and increase their safety at the workplace, it also increases the financial burden on the firm and reduces workers' dress choices.
In recent years,
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uniforms
play a vital role in the organizations,
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so
certain masses believe that
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companies
should
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make
their
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workers
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come
in specific
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dress
code on duty. Although it
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helps
in recognizing the
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employees
and
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improves
their safety at work, it not
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only
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reduces
the freedom of
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workers
,
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but
also
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increases
the financial burden on the organizations.

To commence with, when
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employees
wear a
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uniform
while working, it could benefit the
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company
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because
wearing the
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uniform
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helps
in identifying the
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workers
working at
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different
levels in the organization.
As a result
, they can be
easily
recognized.
Moreover
, it enhances the safety of the
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workers
as these
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dresses
are
specifically
designed for the nature of work.
Thus
, if any accident occurs, it might save the
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workers
from major injuries.
For example
,
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Swaraj
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makes
mechanical components, and it allocated specific
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colour
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dresses
, such as white, yellow and green to their supervisors,
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workers
and managers
respectively
.
Also
, these
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dresses
are made
from 90 percent nylon, which protects them from excessive heat and mechanical impact.
Therefore
,
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uniform
plays a significant role for
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workers
as well
as organizations.

On the other hand
, the major drawback of making
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uniforms
mandatory is that the
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employees
might lose their freedom
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because
they cannot wear their
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favourite
clothing and accessories associated with it.
Furthermore
, if an organization regulates a
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dress
code, then it could
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increase
the financial burden on it
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because
this process of distributing
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dresses
can cost a lot to the
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company
.
For instance
, in a recent survey conducted by The Tribune, it
is found
that the
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companies
in which
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workers
wear specific
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dresses
; there is an
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increase
of 20 percent in the expenses.
Hence
, it affects the
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company
not
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only
financially
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but
also
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reduces
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employees’
satisfaction.

To summarize
, while,
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uniforms
give identity to the
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workers
and
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increase
their safety at the workplace, it
also
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increases
the financial burden on the firm and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduces
workers'
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dress
choices.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Talk about a special opportunity that was given to you. Explain why the opportunity was important. (TOEFL iBT 1st Question of Speaking Section) v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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