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You are studying in a college and your friend recently asked your opinion about it. Write a letter to your friend explaining the college and giving your recommendations. In your letter, include: why did you apply for admission to this college? what do you lik v.1

You are studying in a college and your friend recently asked your opinion about it. Write a letter to your friend explaining the college and giving your recommendations. In your letter, include: why did you apply for admission to this college? what do you lik v. 1
Undoubtedly, it is true that new technologies had an influence on communication between people. Over the past few decades, technology has affected relationships in various ways. In my opinion, there are both positive and negative effects. In turn, this essay will discuss the role of automation in communications with other people. On the one hand, these developments can be extremely positive cooperation between people in different countries was much more difficult when communication was limited to written or letters. These days majority of people use advanced communication tools to communicate with each other, such as email or phone. For example, a student can now take video lessons with a teacher in a different city or country. In turn, I believe that the benefits of technology far out weight the disadvantages. On the other hand, there is an argument that new technologies have made people less sociable. The more people use technology, The more they become sedentary. Therefore, may be harmful to their health. For instance, major of young people choose to make friends online rather than with their peers in the real world, while these applications help people to contact with each other in distant places. By contrast, this was impossible in earlier years. Hence, these technologies have brought people closer than before. In conclusion, new technology has brought some positive development in the ways people interact together. However, there are some negative impacts of technology on the types of relationships people make. In my opinion, if these tools are used responsibly, they are a boon to mankind.
Undoubtedly
, it is true that new
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technologies
had an influence on
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communication
between
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people
. Over the past few decades,
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technology
has
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affected
relationships in various ways. In my opinion, there are both
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positive
and
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negative
effects. In turn, this essay will discuss the role of automation in communications with
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other
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people
.

On the one hand, these developments can be
extremely
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positive
cooperation between
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people
in
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different
countries was much more difficult when
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communication
was limited
to written or letters. These
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days
majority of
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people
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use
advanced
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communication
tools to communicate with each
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other
, such as email or phone.
For example
, a student can
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now
take video lessons with a teacher in a
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different
city or country. In turn, I believe that the benefits of
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technology
far out weight the disadvantages.

On the
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other
hand, there is an argument that new
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technologies
have made
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people
less sociable. The more
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people
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use
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technology
, The more they become sedentary.
Therefore
, may be harmful to their health.
For instance
, major of young
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people
choose to
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make
friends online
rather
than with their peers in the real world, while these applications
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help
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people
to contact with each
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other
in distant places. By contrast, this was impossible in earlier years.
Hence
, these
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technologies
have brought
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people
closer than
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before
.

In conclusion
, new
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technology
has brought
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some
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positive
development in the ways
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people
interact together.
However
, there are
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some
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negative
impacts of
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technology
on the types of relationships
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people
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make
. In my opinion, if these tools are
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used
responsibly
, they are a boon to mankind.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You are studying in a college and your friend recently asked your opinion about it. Write a letter to your friend explaining the college and giving your recommendations. In your letter, include: why did you apply for admission to this college? what do you lik v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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