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You are staying in rented accommodation. You recently held a party to celebrate your birthday. Several neighbours have complained about the noise to your landlord. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter: apologize for the disturbance explain v.1

You are staying in rented accommodation. You recently held a party to celebrate your birthday. Several neighbours have complained about the noise to your landlord. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter: apologize for the disturbance explain v. 1
Young adults in our society today are experiencing an increase in strain from every aspect of life. This piece will discuss the two main reasons why this is the case in the world today, including globalisation and bad influence. This essay will also suggest ways in which societal tension on children can be reduced, including social media policies and proper education. The global nature of the earth and peer pressure are two major reasons whý majority of children today are facing different types of strain. This is because the earth is now a global village; hence, an individual does not have to be close-by to positively or negativelý have an influence on another. For example, the social media platforms connect individuals from all over the world. Therefore, a child from one end of the world can compare his/her life to another person from the other end of the earth. This, often increases the burden on such an individual. In order to alleviate these problems, parents should deliberately teach their children about societal Pressure, as well as the causes and damages it has. In addition, the government should implement a no-social media policy for adolescents, younger than nineteen years of age. By doing this, it is expected that young adults would have a better grasp of their minds before being exposed to social platforms. For instance, it was discovered in a research carried out at Harvard about the ills of social media applications, that exposure to these applications are socially detrimental to adolescents. To summarise, instilling knowledge deliberately in children and implementing policies regarding social media usage are ways we can lessen these pressures as a society. To recapitulate, more and more children are being exposed to tensions from the society. This piece discussed what causes of these tensions. Furthermore, this write-up also suggested ways by which these pressures can be curbed.
Young adults in our society
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today
are experiencing an increase in strain from every aspect of life.

This piece will discuss the two main reasons why this is the case in the world
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today
, including
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globalisation
and
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bad
influence. This essay will
also
suggest ways in which societal tension on
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children
can be
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reduced
, including
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social
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media
policies and proper education.

The global nature of the earth and peer pressure are two major reasons
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whý
majority of
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children
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today
are facing
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different
types of strain. This is
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because
the earth is
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now
a global village;
hence
, an individual does not
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have to
be close-by to
positively
or
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negativelý
have an influence on another.
For example
, the
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social
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media
platforms connect individuals from all over the world.
Therefore
, a child from one
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end
of the world can compare his/her life to another person from the other
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end
of the earth. This,
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often
increases the burden on such an individual.

In order to alleviate these problems, parents should
deliberately
teach their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
about societal

Pressure,
as well
as the causes and damages it has.
In addition
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should implement a no-social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
policy for adolescents, younger than nineteen years of age. By doing this, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
that young adults would have a better grasp of their minds
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before
being exposed
to
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social
platforms.
For instance
, it
was discovered
in
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a research
carried out at Harvard about the ills of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
applications, that exposure to these applications are
socially
detrimental to adolescents. To
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summarise
, instilling knowledge
deliberately
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
and implementing policies regarding
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
usage are ways we can lessen these pressures as a society.

To recapitulate, more and more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
are
being exposed
to tensions from the society.

This piece discussed what causes of these tensions.
Furthermore
, this write-up
also
suggested ways by which these pressures can
be curbed
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay You are staying in rented accommodation. You recently held a party to celebrate your birthday. Several neighbours have complained about the noise to your landlord. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter: apologize for the disturbance explain v. 1

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
311 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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