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one long vacation or several short vacation throughout a year? There are mixed opinions about whether to take a long vacation or a multiple short vacations during a year and I believe that taking several short vacations is better because of two reasons. Fi v.1

one long vacation or several short vacation throughout a year? There are mixed opinions about whether to take a long vacation or a multiple short vacations during a year and I believe that taking several short vacations is better because of two reasons. Fi v. 1
Some people believe that it is essential to abstain from eating meat and fish to protect our health and furthermore, ensure the world's environment is kept safe. Although I agree that it is unwise to eat excessive amounts of meat, nature has its rules which cannot be changed by people’s eating habits. Humans need to obtain important proteins contained only in animal flesh and fish that supports us to live, proteins which cannot be found in vegetables or fruits. Obviously, we cannot live a healthy life without fat derived from, for example, beef or pork. Besides, nowadays most edible meat comes from domestic livestock reared exclusively to provide food for people, so it does not affect the balance of nature. The natural food chain would not be harmed because of our normal diet. However, it is also reasonable for us firstly, to ration our consumption of food obtained from animals. It is a well-known fact, eating less meat and more vegetables are highly beneficial to our health. We can get balanced nutrition from different varieties of food. Of course, we must consider some people kill precious species for high sums of money, for instance to satisfy the needs for certain mixtures of traditional medicines as well as for dinner tables. If more people want to eat rare mammals and sea-life, then these creatures would face the risk of extinction, if that were to happen, there may well be a chain reaction which could result in serious damage to environments around the world. In conclusion, we do not need to refuse meat or fish, but reduce and alter our diets. Eating them within a limit is the best way to improve our health and general being, and also, as I have mentioned above, we ensure that nature in the wild is protected.
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believe that it is essential to abstain from
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eating
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meat
and fish to protect our health and
furthermore
, ensure the world's environment is
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kept
safe. Although I
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agree
that it is unwise to eat excessive amounts of
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meat
, nature has its
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rules
which cannot be
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changed
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people’s
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eating
habits.

Humans need to obtain
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important
proteins contained
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only
in animal flesh and fish that supports us to
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live
, proteins which cannot
be found
in vegetables or fruits.
Obviously
, we cannot
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live
a healthy life without
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fat
derived from,
for example
, beef or pork.
Besides
, nowadays most edible
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meat
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comes
from domestic livestock reared exclusively to provide
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food
for
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people
,
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so
it does not affect the balance of nature. The natural
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food
chain would not
be harmed
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because
of our normal diet.

However
, it is
also
reasonable for us
firstly
, to ration our consumption of
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food
obtained from animals. It is a well-known fact,
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eating
less
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meat
and more vegetables are
highly
beneficial to our health. We can
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get
balanced nutrition from
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different
varieties of
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food
.
Of course
, we
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must
consider
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some
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people
kill precious species for high sums of money,
for instance
to satisfy the needs for certain mixtures of traditional medicines
as well
as for dinner tables. If more
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people
want to eat rare mammals and sea-life, then these creatures would face the
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risk
of extinction, if that were to happen, there may well be a chain reaction which could result in serious damage to environments around the world.

In conclusion
, we do not need to refuse
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meat
or fish,
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but
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reduce
and alter our diets.
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Eating
them within a limit is the best way to
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improve
our health and general being, and
also
, as I have mentioned above, we ensure that nature in the wild
is protected
.
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IELTS essay one long vacation or several short vacation throughout a year? There are mixed opinions about whether to take a long vacation or a multiple short vacations during a year and I believe that taking several short vacations is better because of two reasons. Fi v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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