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You are having some trouble with a work colleague. Write to your employer. In your letter: explain what the problem isdescribe how it is affecting youmake a suggestion about what could be done. v.1

You are having some trouble with a work colleague. Write to your employer. In your letter: explain what the problem isdescribe how it is affecting youmake a suggestion about what could be done. v. 1
The technological advances have affected many aspects of our lives which have both benefits and drawbacks. One of the controversial topics related to digitalisation is e-Books. It is argued by some people that traditional paper books are out of date and should be replaced by electronic ones. In my opinion, although e-books have many advantages, printed books are still popular and they are used as the most prevalent way of reading in many societies. This essay will discuss both sides of this topic. First of all, it should be said that, undoubtedly, like any other form of technology, e-books bring many benefits to our lives. Convenience and availability are its most obvious positive outcomes. For example, there are many online websites such as Amazon or Goodreads, that we can search and download any books we want in a more cost-effective way. As a result, many people prefer to turn to the electronic versions of books in recent years. On the other hand, despite having many benefits, e-books do not have one important quality which is the "sense of book". To exemplify, many people who read e-books have their own paper notebooks to jot down some special elaborate sentences or in the case of educational e-books, it is common for students to take note of their paper to emphasize better memorized some points. In conclusion, e-books and digital book reader devices have facilitated human lives by their convenience, portability, and also sustainability, but, for a reading addict, traditional printed books cannot be replaced easily by any other things, even in developed nations.
The technological advances have
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affected
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many
aspects of our
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lives
which have both benefits and drawbacks. One of the controversial topics related to
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digitalisation
is e-Books. It
is argued
by
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some
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people
that traditional paper
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books
are out of date and should
be replaced
by electronic ones. In my opinion, although e-books have
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many
advantages, printed
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books
are
still
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popular and
they are
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used
as the most prevalent way of reading in
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many
societies. This essay will discuss both sides of this topic.

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First of all
, it should
be said
that,
undoubtedly
, like any other form of technology, e-books bring
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many
benefits to our
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lives
. Convenience and availability are its most obvious
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positive
outcomes.
For example
, there are
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many
online websites such as Amazon or
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Goodreads
, that we can search and download any
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books
we want in a more cost-effective way.
As a result
,
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many
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people
prefer to turn to the electronic versions of
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books
in recent years.

On the other hand
, despite having
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many
benefits, e-books do not have one
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important
quality which is the
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sense of book
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"
. To exemplify,
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many
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people
who read e-books have their
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own
paper notebooks to jot down
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some
special elaborate sentences or in the case of educational e-books, it is common for students to take note of their paper to emphasize better memorized
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some
points.

In conclusion
, e-books and digital
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book
reader devices have facilitated human
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lives
by their convenience, portability, and
also
sustainability,
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but
, for a reading addict, traditional printed
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books
cannot
be replaced
easily
by any other things, even in developed nations.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You are having some trouble with a work colleague. Write to your employer. In your letter: explain what the problem isdescribe how it is affecting youmake a suggestion about what could be done. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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