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You are going to travel soon. Write to your neighbor and ask for help. In your letter say– Why do you need help? – What do you need him/her to do, and when? – What should he/she do if anything happens? v.2

You are going to travel soon. Write to your neighbor and ask for help. In your letter say– Why do you need help? – What do you need him/her to do, and when? – What should he/she do if anything happens? v. 2
Dear Anne, How are you? I want to let you know I will go on vacation next week and I want to ask you a favor. I will travel with my sister and she has cats allergic so unfortunately, Mr. Smith cannot be with us during this trip. So, I wonder do you mind to feed him during these days? I usually put his plate in the kitchen. He eats milk in the morning and afternoon and cat foods for lunch. Besides, if you take him out for walking in the night, I will be appreciated. Although, he is completely familiar with our neighborhoods, please never open the back door. The last thing is should mention during my journey I will be online via Telegram and I always check my email as well. So, if any unexpected event happens, feel free and send me a text or you can even call me. If I am not available, you can talk with my landlord Miss. Adams. She always gives me the best solutions. With Love, Mari.
Dear Anne,

How are you? I want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know I will go on vacation
next
week and I want to ask you a favor.

I will travel with my
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
sister and
she has cats allergic
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so
unfortunately, Mr. Smith cannot be with us during this trip.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, I wonder do you
The verb 'mind' is used with the gerund form: "mind feeding".
mind to feed
him during these days? I
usually
put his plate in the kitchen. He eats milk in the morning and afternoon and cat foods for lunch.
Besides
, if you take him out for walking in the night, I will
be appreciated
.

Although, he is completely familiar with our neighborhoods,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
never open the back door. The last thing
Did you mean "it"?
is
should mention during my journey I will be online via Telegram and I always
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
my email
as well
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, if any unexpected
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
happens, feel free and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me a text or you can even call me. If I am not available, you can talk with my landlord Miss. Adams. She always gives me the best solutions.

With
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Love
,

Mari.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay You are going to travel soon. Write to your neighbor and ask for help. In your letter say– Why do you need help? – What do you need him/her to do, and when? – What should he/she do if anything happens? v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
175 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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