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You are due to start an English language course next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to the manager of the language school, Sally Flannigan. In your letter: explain your situationdescribe your problemstell him v.2

You are due to start an English language course next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to the manager of the language school, Sally Flannigan. In your letter: explain your situationdescribe your problemstell him v. 2
Dear Sally, Hope you are doing well. I am writing in reference to inform you that I won’t be able to start an English course scheduled next week due to some problems at my office. Let me explain in detail. To elucidate I am travelling to Singapore for an important communication event which is scheduled next week. Although I tried to reschedule my travel the company management wants me to travel as our company is launching a new product at the event. Additionally, I have a few business meetings aligned with telecom suppliers to discuss future strategy and penetration in enterprise markets. Hence due to these problems, I am unable to start the course in March. Hence I would suggest to realign me with a fresh batch in mid of April as I will be back in India at that time. I look forward to your response and seeing you when I join the course. Yours sincerely Said
Dear Sally,

Hope you are doing well. I am writing in reference to inform you that I won’t be able to
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start
an English course scheduled
next
week due to
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some
problems at my office.
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Let
me
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explain
in detail.

To elucidate I am travelling to Singapore for an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
communication
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
which
is scheduled
next
week. Although I tried to reschedule my travel the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
management wants me to travel as our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
is launching a new product at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
.
Additionally
, I have a few business meetings aligned with telecom suppliers to discuss future strategy and penetration in enterprise markets.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Hence
due to these problems, I am unable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
the course in March.

Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Hence
I would
The verb 'suggest' is used with the gerund form: "suggest realigning".
suggest to realign
me with a fresh batch in mid of April as I will be back in India at that time. I look forward to your response and seeing you when I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the course.

Yours
sincerely


Said
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay You are due to start an English language course next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to the manager of the language school, Sally Flannigan. In your letter: explain your situationdescribe your problemstell him v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
157 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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