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With an increasing percentage of the population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree? v.2

With an increasing percentage of the population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. v. 2
According to some people, the rise in the use of internet based communication tools and text messages will result in the demise of face to face communication. I strongly agree with this view. In my opinion, the latest forms of communication will eclipse traditional methods soon. Internet based communication is becoming more and more popular because it is quick and reliable. Since internet networks are now available in all parts of the world, people can communicate with their friends, family and clients scattered across the world at any hour of the day. Also internet communication is possible in many different ways. For example, we can send an email or engage in a video chat. In other words, the latest system of communication has made life much easier with useful features like inexpensive video chatting with family and friends. For example, I use Skype every evening to chat with my parents in India. Another benefit is that the instant communication tools of of the modern era eliminate the need to travel long distances to have an interaction or deliver a message. Thus, it can be considered economic too and highly suitable for business and education needs. As face to face interactions may require travelling and meeting at a certain place, they are a time consuming process, which is unsuitable for the requirement of the modern life where one needs to do more in less time. Hence, the age old face to face chat is now considered almost obsolete and is used limitedly. To exemplify, now a trader in a country can buy products from a vendor in another continent through a simple email without ever seeing each other’s face which makes their business transactions quicker and boosts their trades. In conclusion, the use of modern technology has grown substantially leading to frequent use of video calls, emails, text messages and voice mails and minimised the time and effort required for in-person communication. This trend suggests that it will certainly replace face to face chat in near future.
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, the rise in the
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use
of internet based
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communication
tools and text messages will result in the demise of
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face
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communication
. I
strongly
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agree
with this view. In my opinion, the latest forms of
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communication
will eclipse traditional methods
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soon
.

Internet based
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communication
is becoming more and more popular
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because
it is quick and reliable. Since internet networks are
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now
available in all parts of the world,
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people
can communicate with their friends, family and clients scattered across the world at any hour of the day.
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Also
internet
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communication
is possible in
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many
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different
ways.
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, we can
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send
an email or engage in a video
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chat
.
In other words
, the latest system of
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communication
has made life much easier with useful features like inexpensive video chatting with family and friends.
For example
, I
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use
Skype every evening to
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chat
with my parents in India.

Another benefit is that the instant
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communication
tools
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of of
the modern era eliminate the need to travel long distances to have an interaction or deliver a message.
Thus
, it can
be considered
economic too and
highly
suitable for business and education needs. As
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face
to
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face
interactions may require travelling and meeting at a certain place, they are a
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time consuming
process, which is unsuitable for the requirement of the modern life where one needs to do more in less time.
Hence
, the age
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old
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face
to
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chat
is
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now
considered almost obsolete and is
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used
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limitedly
. To exemplify,
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now
a trader in a country can
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buy
products from a vendor in another continent through a simple email without ever seeing each other’s
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face
which
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makes
their business transactions quicker and boosts their trades.

In conclusion
, the
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use
of modern technology has grown
substantially
leading to frequent
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use
of video calls, emails, text messages and voice mails and
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minimised
the time and effort required for in-person
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communication
. This trend suggests that it will
certainly
replace
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face
to
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face
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
chat
in near future.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay With an increasing percentage of the population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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