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You are about to star social-meeting in a particular area where people from different nationalities can take part. Write a letter to the editor of local newspaper requesting him to publish information about this: •What activities you have to planned•Wh v.1

You are about to star social-meeting in a particular area where people from different nationalities can take part. Write a letter to the editor of local newspaper requesting him to publish information about this: •What activities you have to planned•Wh v. 1
Natural habitat plays a vital role in the planet. Many people reckon that the paramount issue of the environment is the extinction of particular kinds of animals and plants, however, others believe that there are more essential problems. Therefore, ahead of my opinion, both the views will be discussed further. Examining the former view, there are those who say that specific habitat are disappeared nowadays. The principle reason is biodiversity and balance. If an animal in the food chain ceases to exist, another member of the chain may end up in danger of a decline in the member. Another point to support this view is forests are being cut down to make other facilities, while endangered animals are being poached, so that their body parts can be sent to Russia to make leather bags, shoes, and other items. For example, there is one island in the pacific, where poachers killed local cats for fur. If we did not use leather products, they do not vanished. Considering the latter part of the topic, a group of people sat that other surrounding issues are significant. To begin with, the major environmental issue is climate change. This is caused by numerous factors such as air pollution and the loss of forests. It has massive potential ramifications, such as sea level rises and increase toxic gases in the atmosphere. However, this could lead to the extinction of humanity and the destruction of our world. Finally, as growing cities more and more toxic waste is produced, and there is no space for animals. Therefore, human activities are produced other habitat problems. In conclusion, ever though the protection of species is vital for biodiversity there are issues which can cause species extinction and pollution is a major issue of climate.
Natural habitat plays a vital role in the planet.
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Many
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people
reckon that the paramount
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issue
of the environment is the extinction of particular kinds of
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animals
and plants,
however
, others believe that there are more essential problems.
Therefore
, ahead of my opinion, both the views will
be discussed
further
.

Examining the former view, there are those who say that specific habitat
are disappeared
nowadays. The
Did you mean "principal" (=main)?
principle
reason is biodiversity and balance. If an
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animal
in the food chain ceases to exist, another member of the chain may
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end
up in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
of a decline in the member. Another point to support this view is forests are being
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cut
down to
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make
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other
facilities, while endangered
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animals
are
being poached
,
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so
that their body parts can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
to Russia to
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make
leather bags, shoes, and
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other
items.
For example
, there is one island in the pacific, where poachers killed local cats for fur. If we did not
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use
leather products, they do not vanished.

Considering the latter part of the topic, a group of
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people
sat that
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other
surrounding
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issues
are significant. To
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begin
with, the major environmental
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issue
is climate
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change
. This
is caused
by numerous factors such as air pollution and the loss of forests. It has massive potential ramifications, such as sea level rises and increase toxic gases in the atmosphere.
However
, this could lead to the extinction of humanity and the destruction of our world.
Finally
, as growing cities more and more toxic waste
is produced
, and there is no space for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
.
Therefore
, human activities
are produced
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other
habitat problems.

In conclusion
, ever though the protection of species is vital for biodiversity there are
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issues
which can cause species extinction and pollution is a major
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issue
of climate.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You are about to star social-meeting in a particular area where people from different nationalities can take part. Write a letter to the editor of local newspaper requesting him to publish information about this: •What activities you have to planned•Wh v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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