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Question Your Friend bought the tickets for the theatre for both of you Write a letter to your friend you cannot go to the theatre In your letter Apologize Explain the situation Tell him what he can do with the extra tickets v.1

Question Your Friend bought the tickets for the theatre for both of you Write a letter to your friend you cannot go to the theatre In your letter Apologize Explain the situation Tell him what he can do with the extra tickets v. 1
Whether art and artists should receive government funding has always been a topic of debate. Some people argue that the government should spend its money on more important things like health and education instead of sponsoring artists and art events. I do not quite agree with this view. In my opinion, it is important to spend on sectors like healthcare, education and infrastructure. This, however, does not mean that art and artists can be neglected. Artists can’t save lives or build bridges, but they still contribute to the society in their own way. Music, for example, soothes the mind. Listening to music is actually the favourite pastime of busy professionals who lead extremely stressed out lives. In other words, by supporting music and musicians, the government is indirectly helping the emotional well being of its people. Likewise, dancers enthralled the audience with their performance. Cultural programmes like music and dance, draw a large audience and generate money. By simply organizing such events for art lovers and tourists, the government can not only help budding artists who need an avenue to showcase their talent, but also generate revenue that can be used for developing other sectors. Tourism is a major source of revenue for governments all over the world and artists have immense power to attract tourists. For example, Indian classical dances and music have always fascinated a large number of tourists. They visit the country to watch these performances and even enrolled in dance and music schools here to learn the art. This is a source of revenue for the government. To conclude, nobody is asking the government to promote the arts at the expense of other sectors. Any such move would be suicidal. Instead, what the government needs to do is to earmark a small portion of its revenue for the promotion of the arts. Like any other sector, the arts also generate jobs and help the society on the whole.
Whether
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artists
should receive
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government
funding has always been a topic of debate.
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Some
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people
argue that the
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government
should spend its money on more
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important
things like health and education
instead
of sponsoring
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artists
and
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art
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events
. I do not quite
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agree
with this view. In my opinion, it is
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important
to spend on sectors like healthcare, education and infrastructure. This,
however
, does not mean that
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art
and
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artists
can
be neglected
.

Artists can’t save
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lives
or build bridges,
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but
they
still
contribute to the society in their
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own
way.
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Music
,
for example
, soothes the mind. Listening to
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music
is actually the
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favourite
pastime of busy professionals who lead
extremely
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stressed
out
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lives
. In
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other
words, by supporting
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music
and musicians, the
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government
is
indirectly
helping the emotional
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well being
of its
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people
.
Likewise
, dancers enthralled the audience with their performance. Cultural
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programmes
like
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music
and dance, draw a large audience and generate money. By
simply
organizing such
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events
for
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art
lovers and tourists, the
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government
can not
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only
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help
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budding
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artists
who need an avenue to showcase their talent,
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but
also
generate
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revenue
that can be
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used
for developing
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other
sectors.

Tourism is a major source of
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revenue
for
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governments
all over the world and
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artists
have immense power to attract tourists.
For example
, Indian classical dances and
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music
have always fascinated
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a large number of
tourists. They visit the country to
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watch
these performances and even enrolled in dance and
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music
schools here to learn the
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art
. This is a source of
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revenue
for the
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government
.

To conclude
, nobody is asking the
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government
to promote the
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arts
at the expense of
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other
sectors. Any such
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move
would be suicidal.
Instead
, what the
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government
needs to do is to earmark a
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small
portion of its
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revenue
for the promotion of the
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arts
. Like any
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other
sector, the
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arts
also
generate jobs and
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help
the society
on the whole
.
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IELTS essay Question Your Friend bought the tickets for the theatre for both of you Write a letter to your friend you cannot go to the theatre In your letter Apologize Explain the situation Tell him what he can do with the extra tickets v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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