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"Written books are not needed because we can read almost everything on the internet". Do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.2

"Written books are not needed because we can read almost everything on the internet". v. 2
Reading is a habit which is developed at a very young age as it helps in personality development. Nevertheless, the question is, is it better to read a book or use the internet as everything is available on it. Both situations have their advantages and disadvantages, therefore, I would not agree or disagree with the statement. Reading books is a good practice, as it helps to improve vocabulary and assists in the improving concentration. The benefit with books is that, it is reviewed and edited multiple times by publishers, which ensures the accuracy of language. Moreover, it also helps in relaxing the mind from stressful situations. In addition to the above, it educates readers with information from renowned authors. Yet, it could be a challenge to find a lot of data in a short period of time, if needed. For instance, reading an old Shakespere novel would add to an overall development. The Internet is also a very good source of information, however, reading through websites would depend on the source. Of course, it is an Ocean of information, which is accessible with one click. Nonetheless, it is important to filter the facts from what is available. It is easy to access articles, which may not be the same, while looking for specific content in books. Due to the type of content available online, it can also be a bit disturbing as it does not give the same peaceful experience as a book. For example, while you are looking for material for a research project, the internet would more helpful. To conclude, written books and internet have their own benefits, which would depend on the purpose of it. To illustrate, the difference can be understood with an autobiography. The book would be concise, despite that, searching on the web for the same would give varied stories. Hence, both are good, but it is important to learn the use of it.
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is developed
at a
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very
young age as it
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helps
in personality development.
Nevertheless
, the question is, is it better to read a
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book
or
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use
the internet as everything is available on it. Both situations have their advantages and disadvantages,
therefore
, I would not
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agree
or disagree with the statement.

Reading
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books
is a
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good
practice, as it
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helps
to
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improve
vocabulary and assists in the improving concentration. The benefit with
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books
is that, it
is reviewed
and edited multiple times by publishers, which ensures the accuracy of language.
Moreover
, it
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
in relaxing the mind from stressful situations.
In addition
to the above, it educates readers with information from renowned authors.
Yet
, it could be a challenge to find
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a lot of
data in a short period of time, if needed.
For instance
, reading an
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old
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Shakespere
novel would
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add
to an
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development.

The Internet is
also
a
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very
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good
source of information,
however
, reading through websites would depend on the source.
Of course
, it is an Ocean of information, which is accessible with one click. Nonetheless, it is
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important
to filter the facts from what is available. It is easy to access articles, which may not be the same, while looking for specific content in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
. Due to the type of content available online, it can
also
be a bit disturbing as it does not give the same peaceful experience as a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
.
For example
, while you are looking for material for a research project, the internet would more helpful.

To conclude
, written
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books
and internet have their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
benefits, which would depend on the purpose of it. To illustrate, the difference can
be understood
with an autobiography. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
would be concise, despite that, searching on the web for the same would give varied stories.
Hence
, both are
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good
,
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but
it is
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important
to learn the
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use
of it.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay "Written books are not needed because we can read almost everything on the internet". v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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