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Do you feel that it is a good idea for government to place a restriction on the number of children a family can have in order to control rising population numbers? v.1

Do you feel that it is a good idea for government to place a restriction on the number of children a family can have in order to control rising population numbers? v. 1
For some years now, there has been an increasing rise in population numbers. Due to this, the government has proposed the idea of placing a limitation on the number of offsprings a family can reproduce. This essay will discuss why limiting the number of children in a family is not the best option. First and foremost, couples should have the liberty of bearing as many children as they desire. There is a popular saying that goes by ‘Children are the leaders of tomorrow ‘ so therefore, if restrictions are placed, a lot of unborn children will be deprived of the opportunity of becoming our future leaders. Furthermore, these unborn children could grow into great men in the society, they could become teachers, doctors, pharmacists, but to mention a few, who can save lives and impact knowledge on others. For example, there is a popular man in Oyo state, Nigeria that has over 30 children, all of whom are very successful and own big companies that have created job opportunities for many people. Secondly, it is the sole responsibility of the government to provide basic amenities, good education, health facilities and so on, to cater for the need of every single person living under their care. Streamlining the number of children from a family will only make our rulers relaxed and not carry out their roles in the society. Rather than them looking for an easy way out of the situation of overpopulation, they should focus more on providing the basic resources required for the well being of their subjects at large. In summary, the government should devise other means of tackling the increasing rise in population number and allow families bear as many children as they wish
For
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some
years
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now
, there has been an increasing rise in population
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numbers
. Due to this, the
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government
has proposed the
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idea
of placing a limitation on the
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number
of
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offsprings
a
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family
can reproduce. This essay will discuss why limiting the
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number
of
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children
in a
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family
is not the best option.

First
and foremost, couples should have the liberty of bearing as
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many
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children
as they desire. There is a popular saying that goes by
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‘Children
are the leaders of tomorrow ‘
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so
therefore
, if restrictions
are placed
,
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a lot of
unborn
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children
will
be deprived
of the opportunity of becoming our future leaders.
Furthermore
, these unborn
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children
could grow into great
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men
in the society, they could become teachers, doctors, pharmacists,
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but
to mention a few, who can save
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lives
and impact knowledge on others.
For example
, there is a popular
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man
in
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Oyo
state, Nigeria that has over 30
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children
, all of whom are
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very
successful and
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own
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big
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companies
that have created job opportunities for
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many
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people
.

Secondly
, it is the sole responsibility of the
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government
to provide basic amenities,
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good
education, health facilities and
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so
on, to cater for the need of every single person living under their care. Streamlining the
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number
of
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children
from a
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family
will
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only
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make
our rulers relaxed and not carry out their roles in the society.
Rather
than them looking for an easy way out of the situation of overpopulation, they should focus more on providing the basic resources required for the
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well being
of their subjects at large.

In summary, the
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government
should devise other means of tackling the increasing rise in population
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number
and
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allow
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families
bear as
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many
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children
as they wish
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you feel that it is a good idea for government to place a restriction on the number of children a family can have in order to control rising population numbers? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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