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Writing task: Giving lectures in auditoriums to large numbers of students is an old way of teaching. With the technology available today, everything should be done online. Do you agree or disagree v.2

Writing task: Giving lectures in auditoriums to large numbers of students is an old way of teaching. With the technology available today, everything should be done online. v. 2
Some people feel that in this age of online lectures and computer programs, the traditional way of giving lectures in large classrooms has become old-fashioned / ineffective. I do not agree with this view. In my opinion, online lectures can be very convenient; however, traditional way of teaching is more effective and makes learning easier. On the one hand, many people choose to take online lectures because they are very convenient. Many people study while working to upgrade their educational qualifications to get a promotion at work. These online lectures and online courses will allow working people to watch the lectures during their free time. For instance, these lectures can be watched during the weekend and they also allow people to pause in the middle of the lecture and and watch later. Because of this flexibility and convenience online lectures are very popular among many people. Conversely, many students find the traditional way of teaching in classrooms more effective. Traditional lectures allow students to interact with lecturers when there is clarification required. To put it in another way, traditional lectures establish a connection between lecturers and students. For instance, a lecturer can tell at any point of time whether or not his students understand the lesson by simply looking at their faces and body language. Since online lectures are pre-recorded and delivered via the computer, this interaction between the teacher and the student is not possible. To conclude, it is evident that online lectures give people the freedom to learn at a time convenient to them whereas traditional lectures provide the opportunity to interact with the teacher and clear doubts. In my opinion, online lectures cannot completely replace the class room lectures because they fail to create an important human connection between lecturers and students.
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people
feel that in this age of
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online
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lectures
and computer programs, the
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traditional
way of giving
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lectures
in large classrooms has become
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old
-fashioned / ineffective. I do not
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agree
with this view. In my opinion,
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online
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lectures
can be
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very
convenient;
however
,
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traditional
way of teaching is more effective and
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makes
learning easier.

On the one hand,
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many
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people
choose to take
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online
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lectures
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because
they are
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very
convenient.
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Many
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people
study while working to upgrade their educational qualifications to
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get
a promotion at work. These
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online
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lectures
and
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online
courses will
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allow
working
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people
to
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watch
the
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lectures
during their free time.
For instance
, these
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lectures
can be
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watched
during the
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weekend and
they
also
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allow
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people
to pause in the middle of the
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lecture
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and and
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watch
later.
Because of this
flexibility and convenience
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online
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lectures
are
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very
popular among
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many
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people
.

Conversely
,
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many
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students
find the
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traditional
way of teaching in classrooms more effective.
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Traditional
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lectures
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allow
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students
to interact with
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lecturers
when there is clarification required. To put it in another way,
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traditional
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lectures
establish a
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connection between
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lecturers
and
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students
.
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, a
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lecturer
can
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tell
at any point of time
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whether or not
his
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students
understand the lesson by
simply
looking at their faces and body language. Since
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online
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lectures
are pre-recorded and delivered via the computer, this interaction between the teacher and the
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student
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is
not possible.

To conclude
, it is evident that
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online
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lectures
give
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people
the freedom to learn at a time convenient to them whereas
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traditional
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lectures
provide the opportunity to interact with the teacher and
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clear
doubts. In my opinion,
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online
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lectures
cannot completely replace the
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class
room
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lectures
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because
they fail to create an
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important
human
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connection between
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lecturers
and
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students
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Writing task: Giving lectures in auditoriums to large numbers of students is an old way of teaching. With the technology available today, everything should be done online. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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