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Writing Task 2Some film companies spend millions of dollars on the production of an single movie. Is it necessary to spend a lot of money to make a good movie? What factors contribute to the success of a movie? v.1

Writing Task 2Some film companies spend millions of dollars on the production of an single movie. Is it necessary to spend a lot of money to make a good movie? What factors contribute to the success of a movie? v. 1
It is often thought that in the past time pupils were providing a university course in their home town. However, these days there are more chances to make your education in another state. In the next paragraphs, I will discuss the positive and negative effect of this impact. The advantage is that students will learn a new foreign language and develop their knowledge. The reason for this is that learning a new tongue is easier abroad. Furthermore, the young adults will increase in their experience because every place is providing their employment and study in their own way. For example, practice nurses in the Netherlands are not taking care of asthma or diabetic clinics, whereas the United Kingdom does show their nurses how to handle with those patients. All in all, it is true that you will gain a lot of information abroad, whether it's the language or the informative sources. The disadvantage is that there will be an increase in foreign students. The reason for this is that there is more need for tuition and English classes. In other words, educational institutes need to put more effort in those people to keep the passing rate on top. For example, it can be seen that those students need more help to make themselves ready for an exam. So that's why, this is a negative effect for the universities. To conclude, in the previous years, students were doing their university degree in the country where they were living. Although, this has been changed over the past few years and it is possible now to study abroad as well. The positive side of this is that students are able to learn a new language and increase their knowledge. The negative effect is that there will be a huge pressure on the educational places.
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make
your education in another state. In the
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positive
and
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negative
effect of this impact.

The advantage is that
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students
will learn a new foreign language and develop their knowledge.
The reason for this is
that learning a new tongue is easier abroad.
Furthermore
, the young adults will increase in their experience
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because
every place is providing their employment and study in their
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own
way.
For example
, practice nurses in the Netherlands are not taking care of asthma or diabetic clinics, whereas the United Kingdom does
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show
their nurses how to handle with those patients. All in all, it is true that you will gain
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a lot of
information abroad, whether it's the language or the informative sources.

The disadvantage is that there will be an increase in foreign
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students
.
The reason for this is
that there is more need for tuition and English classes.
In other words
, educational institutes need to put more effort in those
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people
to
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keep
the passing rate on top.
For example
, it can be
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seen
that those
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students
need more
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help
to
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make
themselves ready for an exam.
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So
that's why, this is a
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negative
effect for the universities.

To conclude
, in the previous years,
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students
were doing their university degree in the country where they were living. Although, this has been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
over the past few years and it is possible
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
to study abroad
as well
. The
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positive
side of this is that
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students
are able to learn a new language and increase their knowledge. The
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negative
effect is that there will be a huge pressure on the educational places.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Learning another language is not only learning different words for the same things, but learning another way to think about things.
Flora Lewis

IELTS essay Writing Task 2Some film companies spend millions of dollars on the production of an single movie. Is it necessary to spend a lot of money to make a good movie? What factors contribute to the success of a movie? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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