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Businesses should hire employees for their entire lives. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

Businesses should hire employees for their entire lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
Business is the fundamental economic driver of any country. More importantly, the employees of the organisation are the secret to a successful business. I am in agreement that businesses should employ their people for the long term. Companies hire people and spend time and money developing its human resource through training and education. Once employees are trained to the required skill, they become an asset to the organisation for future development. Many fortune 500 companies have skilled people working for them, their entire lives. Employees become reliable and trustworthy for their service to the company over a long period of time. More importantly, workers and businesses are inter-reliant to another. The longer someone stays with the same working place the more assimilated they become with the system and the environment of the company. Workers will naturally take pride and provide their best abilities for the growth of the business. The main reason for employees staying in a particular organisation is job stability. Working in the same company for many years provides economic stability and advancement in career prospect. Bosses will definitely recognize the work ethics and honesty by giving promotion to the suitable worker. More importantly, it is the recognition that people want in order to succeed in life and become a better person. In conclusion, it is best for people to be employed in a particular workplace for their whole life as new skills are taught through education. Companies can rely on honest employees by knowing them for their long service.
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Business
is the fundamental economic driver of any country. More
importantly
, the
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employees
of the
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organisation
are the secret to a successful
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business
. I am in agreement that
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businesses
should employ their
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people
for the long term.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Companies
hire
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people
and spend time and money developing its human resource through training and education. Once
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employees
are trained
to the required
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
, they
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become
an asset to the
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organisation
for future development.
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Many
If the term is a proper noun, use the suggested capitalization.
fortune 500
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companies
have skilled
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people
working for them, their entire
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.

Employees
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become
reliable and trustworthy for their service to the
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company
over a long period of time. More
importantly
, workers and
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businesses
are inter-reliant to another. The longer someone stays with the same working place the more assimilated they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
become
with the system and the environment of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
. Workers will
naturally
take pride and provide their best abilities for the growth of the business.

The main reason for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employees
staying in a particular
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisation' is British English.
organisation
is job stability. Working in the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
years provides economic stability and advancement in career prospect. Bosses will definitely recognize the work ethics and honesty by giving promotion to the suitable worker. More
importantly
, it is the recognition that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
want in order to succeed in life and
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become
a better person.

In conclusion
, it is best for
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people
to
be employed
in a particular workplace for their whole life as new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
are taught
through education.
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Companies
can rely on honest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employees
by knowing them for their long service.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Businesses should hire employees for their entire lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
252 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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