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Some scientists think that there are intelligent life forms on other planets and message should be sent out to contact them. Others think that it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some scientists think that there are intelligent life forms on other planets and message should be sent out to contact them. Others think that it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. v. 1
It is believed that during different stages of learning, academic courses, from the beginning to the end, there is no balance between theoretical and practical learning. Moreover, the educational system mostly emphasizes theory courses, which might hurt students learning processes and skills. In this essay, I am going to reveal some aspects of this contentious issue. When students begin to go to school, in the first place, they face various books in different subjects and most of the time they sit in classrooms and debate about them. For example, I remember when I was studying in primary school, teachers emphasized on teaching, math, science, and so on. There were no practical activities to show us the way of using those theoretical courses, which we used to learn. In high school and universities, things would change, but not much. In these stages, students not only are taught theory courses, but would be taken to some labs, museum and so on, which relate to their studies, and somehow, they could feel and experience things with these activities, which might be effective and could have a good impact on their learning. In university, we had something called the relationship with industry, in which we had sent to some factories and pass working ours in there and after finishing it, we had to make a report of our work. This activity was compulsory and we would not have been graduated if we had not done it. In conclusion, I support this belief, which emphasizes a balance between theoretical and practical skills. In this way, students would not be confused when they are graduated. Therefore, a better future would be ahead of them.
It
is believed
that during
different
stages of
learning
, academic
courses
, from the beginning to the
end
, there is no balance between theoretical and practical
learning
.
Moreover
, the educational system
mostly
emphasizes theory
courses
, which might hurt
students
learning
processes and
skills
. In this essay, I am going to reveal
some
aspects of this contentious issue.

When
students
begin
to go to school, in the
first
place, they face various books in
different
subjects and most of the time they sit in classrooms and debate about them.
For example
, I remember when I was studying in primary school, teachers emphasized on teaching, math, science, and
so
on. There were no practical activities to
show
us the way of using those theoretical
courses
, which we
used
to learn.

In high school and universities, things would
change
,
but
not much. In these stages,
students
not
only
are taught
theory
courses
,
but
would
be taken
to
some
labs, museum and
so
on, which relate to their studies, and somehow, they could feel and experience things with these activities, which might be effective and could have a
good
impact on their
learning
.
In
university, we had something called the relationship with industry, in which we had
sent
to
some
factories and pass working ours in there and after finishing it, we had to
make
a report of our work. This activity was
compulsory and
we would not have
been graduated
if we had not done it.

In conclusion
, I support this belief, which emphasizes a balance between theoretical and practical
skills
. In this way,
students
would not
be confused
when they
are graduated
.
Therefore
, a better future would be ahead of them.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some scientists think that there are intelligent life forms on other planets and message should be sent out to contact them. Others think that it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
7.5
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