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Because the world is changing so quickly, people are now less happy and less satisfy with their lives than people were in the past. Agree or disagree? v.2

Because the world is changing so quickly, people are now less happy and less satisfy with their lives than people were in the past. Agree or disagree? v. 2
The world has much fast been enduring a wide variety changes in all aspects in order to make new platforms for its citizens' life. There has been an ongoing debate as to whether present world is more fascinating for people than past or not. While some people believe that nowadays, people live in the better world because they laways have new conditions, there are others holding the opposes opinion on this point. As far as from my perspective, today' s, people live in better condition than past in that human live in calm condition tucked away from any unsolved problems, also they are able to deal their own problems by using easy methods. The first reason, which should be maintained here is that present generations live in quite atmosphere without facing with unsolved obstacels. As a matter of fact, nowadays, people use a wide range of cutting-edge technology like the internet, developed transportation facilities, reliable medicine procedure and so forth. While in past, ahuge children were died due to absence of enough drug or healthy facility. These amenities made masses powerful enough for enjoying from life and they may be happy and satisfied from their life. Most of the developed technologies are brought from womb of the fast changing mother. Furthermore, people have enough afford for dealing their problems reasoning that most of the families' members have well-paid job and spend time in high of security work place. Unlike the past generations, present persons have enough free time for enjoying from life since they work with accurate and fast units during work that save time for them. Another factor, which deserves to be considered is that today' s, humans are able to handle their unexpected challenges. In that case, most of the present countries have better communication together. It makes an opportunity for working beside each other and solve their main problems, like global warming or ozen layer hole. In contrast, in past, people could not share idea together regardless paying attention to humans' backgrounds because they used to confine their mind in unsuitable religious and tribal attitudes. Additionally, developed technology shrinks the world into a small village and makes a single world culture. It is argued that people live beside each other during research, travel even war. I never forget my trip to India because I learned a huge of new points from oversea. I think, whether I was able to travel to India, if I was lived in hunting gathering time? . To put everything in a nutshell, the world always has new events for humans: therefore, human are able to control these events for making enjoyable time.
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changes
in all aspects in order to
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make
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new
platforms for its
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citizens&
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life
. There has been an ongoing debate
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as to whether
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present
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world
is more fascinating for
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people
than
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or not. While
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some
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people
believe that nowadays,
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people
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live
in the better
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world
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because
they
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laways
have
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new
conditions, there are others holding the opposes opinion on this point. As far as from my perspective,
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today&
#039; s,
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people
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live
in better condition than
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past
in that
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human
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live
in calm condition tucked away from any unsolved
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problems
,
also
they are
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able
to deal their
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own
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problems
by using easy methods.

The
first
reason, which should
be maintained
here is that
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present
generations
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live
in quite atmosphere without facing with unsolved
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obstacels
. As a matter of fact, nowadays,
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people
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use
a wide range of cutting-edge technology like the internet, developed transportation facilities, reliable medicine procedure and
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so
forth. While in
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past
,
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ahuge
children were
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died
due to absence of
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enough
drug or healthy facility. These amenities made masses powerful
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enough
for enjoying from
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life and
they may be happy and satisfied from their
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life
. Most of the developed technologies
are brought
from womb of the
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fast
changing mother.
Furthermore
,
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people
have
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enough
afford for dealing their
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problems
reasoning that most of the
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families&
#039; members have well-paid job and spend
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time
in high of security work place. Unlike the
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past
generations,
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present
persons have
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enough
free
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time
for enjoying from
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life
since they work with accurate and
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fast
units during work that save
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time
for them.

Another factor, which deserves to
be considered
is that
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today&
#039; s,
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humans
are
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able
to handle their unexpected challenges.
In that case
, most of the
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present
countries have better communication together. It
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makes
an opportunity for working beside each other and solve their main
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problems
, like global warming or
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ozen
layer hole.
In contrast
, in
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past
,
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people
could not share
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idea
together regardless paying attention to
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humans&
#039; backgrounds
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because
they
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used
to confine their mind in unsuitable religious and tribal attitudes.
Additionally
, developed technology shrinks the
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world
into a
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small
village and
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makes
a single
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world
culture. It
is argued
that
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people
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live
beside each other during research, travel even war. I never forget my trip to India
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because
I learned
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a huge of
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new
points from oversea. I
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think
, whether I was
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able
to travel to India, if I was
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lived
in hunting gathering
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time
?
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.


To put everything in a nutshell, the
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world
always has
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new
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events
for
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humans
:
therefore
,
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human
are
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able
to control these
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events
for making enjoyable
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time
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
58Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes
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IELTS essay Because the world is changing so quickly, people are now less happy and less satisfy with their lives than people were in the past. Agree or disagree? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
440 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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