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Writing 2: Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of old houses in local areas. Others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own style. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

Writing 2: Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of old houses in local areas. Others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own style. v. 1
People have different opinions as to whether the architectural design of newly built houses should follow the same style of existing homes or follow their style preferences. Personally, I believe that they should have permission to construct unique houses. The option to construct all alike buildings in vicinity is beneficial for many reasons. In many countries, traditional wisdom dictates that a house is a reflection of the wealth or social status of its owner. As a result, the owners of less attractive and less modern houses would feel inferior and less engaged in conversational exchanges with their neighbors. This unfortunate problem is likely to cause social isolation and an overall decrease in life satisfaction in the long term. By contrast, constructing similar houses helps to develop a sense of community and unity within a residential area. On a government level, since all buildings share a common design, the task of supervising the process of construction becomes more manageable, ensuring these buildings satisfy construction safety requirements. However, I support the view that the aesthetic design of unique buildings has far more positive impacts on the psychology of humans and a town as a whole. Living in a modern and dynamic environment which is usually associated with security and comfort is thought to boost our emotional well-being. Research has shown the correlation between poorly-designed buildings and the risk of health deterioration and academic underachievement. On a larger scale, the vivid image of a town with a unique style attracts foreign tourists to come to visit the town, which is conducive to the development of tourism and culture. In conclusion, I concur with the idea that constructing unique houses has more benefits, whereas maintaining an identical design for constructing all buildings in a particular area is worth consideration.
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have
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different
opinions
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as to whether
the architectural
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design
of
newly
built
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houses
should follow the same style of existing homes or follow their style preferences.
Personally
, I believe that they should have permission to construct
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unique
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houses
.

The option to construct all alike
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buildings
in vicinity is beneficial for
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many
reasons. In
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many
countries, traditional wisdom dictates that a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
is a reflection of the wealth or social status of its owner.
As a result
, the owners of less attractive and less modern
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
would feel inferior and less engaged in conversational exchanges with their neighbors. This unfortunate problem is likely to cause social isolation and an
overall
decrease in life satisfaction in the long term. By contrast, constructing similar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to develop a sense of community and unity within a residential area. On a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
level, since all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
share a common
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
design
, the task of supervising the process of construction becomes more manageable, ensuring these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
satisfy construction safety requirements.

However
, I support the view that the aesthetic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
design
of
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unique
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buildings
has far more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
impacts on the psychology of humans and a town as a whole. Living in a modern and dynamic environment which is
usually
associated with security and comfort is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
to boost our emotional well-being. Research has shown the correlation between
poorly
-designed
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buildings
and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of health deterioration and academic underachievement. On a larger scale, the vivid image of a town with a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
unique
style attracts foreign tourists to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to visit the town, which is conducive to the development of tourism and culture.

In conclusion
, I concur with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that constructing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
unique
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
has more benefits, whereas maintaining an identical
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design
for constructing all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
in a particular area is worth consideration.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Writing 2: Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of old houses in local areas. Others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own style. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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