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Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of old houses in local areas. Others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own style. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of old houses in local areas. Others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own style. v. 2
It is a controversial issue as to whether new houses should be built based on the design of local areas, or, whether people should give preference of their own choice in constructing their sweet home. From my perspective, people have the freedom to erect shelters with comfort and all amenities that require in human life. On the one hand, it is extensively popular among people build resident by looking the same structure of the area where they live in. The fact is that if the region has a similar pattern, it arises a sense of community and equality within a residential area. For example, studies have shown that most of the houses of a colony are comparatively same, in a sense that it reflects the status and wealth of that local community. This, invariably, not only enhance the beauty of the residents, but it also creates a bond between local neighbours. This is because if the houses would build differently, the other owners would have got a chance to bullying or burglary. Furthermore, if the government looks all the houses measurement is similar, it would be easier for them to change the structure of the area in a facile manner. On the other hand, a few people would prefer to erect their houses with their own design and structure. If they do so, the terrain would look different with various types of houses which would have myriads of shapes. This, certainly, could increase the aesthetic beauty of that realm which may get praiseworthy comments from international agencies. For instance, in Italy, Venice is widely recognised by its beautiful houses those are different from other buildings, Thus, when a person would think of building his house, he should reflect on his own architecture which would provide comfort as well as requisite of his life. In conclusion, new structure of houses should maintain the similarity of local houses - it is thought by some people, while others have agreed that people should construct houses in completely different styles which would confer ease and facilitate people with all necessities of lives
It is a controversial issue
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as to whether
new
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houses
should
be built
based on the design of
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local
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areas
, or, whether
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people
should give preference of their
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own
choice in constructing their sweet home. From my perspective,
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people
have the freedom to erect shelters with comfort and all amenities that require in human life.

On the one hand, it is
extensively
popular among
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people
build resident by looking the same
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structure
of the
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area
where they
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live
in. The fact is that if the region has a similar pattern, it arises a sense of community and equality within a residential
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area
.
For example
, studies have shown that most of the
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houses
of a colony are
comparatively
same, in a sense that it reflects the status and wealth of that
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local
community. This,
invariably
, not
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only
enhance the beauty of the residents,
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but
it
also
creates a bond between
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local
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neighbours
. This is
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because
if the
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houses
would build
differently
, the
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other
owners would have
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got
a chance to bullying or burglary.
Furthermore
, if the
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government
looks all the
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houses
measurement is similar, it would be easier for them to
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change
the
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structure
of the
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area
Consider replacing "in a facile manner" with the adverb for "facile"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a facile manner
.

On the
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other
hand, a few
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people
would prefer to erect their
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houses
with their
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own
design and
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structure
. If they do
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so
, the terrain would look
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different
with various types of
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houses
which would have myriads of shapes. This,
certainly
, could increase the aesthetic beauty of that realm which may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
praiseworthy comments from international agencies.
For instance
, in Italy, Venice is
widely
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recognised
by its
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beautiful
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houses
those are
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different
from
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other
buildings,
Thus
, when a person would
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think
of building his
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house
, he should reflect on his
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own
architecture which would provide comfort
as well
as requisite of his life.

In conclusion
, new
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structure
of
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houses
should maintain the similarity of
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local
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houses
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
it is
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thought
by
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some
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people
, while others have
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agreed
that
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people
should construct
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houses
in completely
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different
styles which would confer
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ease
and facilitate
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people
with all necessities of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of old houses in local areas. Others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own style. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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