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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.11

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 11
Nowadays, environmental protection has become one of the most important issues the public are concerned with. While some people deem that it is the responsibility of the government and big companies to protect the environment because they hold the power and the resources necessary while individuals are too feeble to make an effort, however, personally I believe that every individual can make a difference. There is an old saying goes as: ‘Drop by drop fills the tub’. This means that individuals do have the capacity to save our motherland if they band together and move towards the same direction. For example, if everyone in China saves one piece of paper every day, nearly a million trees can be saved in one day. Therefore, we must realize the power of each person and shoulder our own responsibility. Moreover, the most important thing must be the effect on big companies and factories caused by public awareness and habits. Specifically, environment-friendly behaviors of the public can largely influence the business strategies of big companies. For example, when disposable plastic bags are not popular anymore in the market, the manufacturers will stop their production and find eco-friendly replacements such as fabric bags. Thus, the power of individuals is maximized and makes a big difference. However, that is not to say we should ignore the responsibility of the government and big companies. Admittedly, in solving some large-scale problems like deforestation and greenhouse effect, the government and big companies should fully harness their technology and power to come up with strategic plans. In conclusion, the connection of every part of society wield a significant role to protect the environment. Only in this way can we assure that we can hand over the planet to our next generation.
Nowadays, environmental protection has become one of the most
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important
issues the public
are concerned
with. While
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some
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people
deem that it is the responsibility of the
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government
and
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big
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companies
to protect the environment
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because
they hold the
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power
and the resources necessary while
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individuals
are too feeble to
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make
an effort,
however
,
personally
I believe that every
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individual
can
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make
a difference.

There is an
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old
saying goes as: ‘Drop by drop fills the tub’. This means that
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individuals
do have the capacity to save our motherland if they band together and
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move
towards the same direction.
For example
, if everyone in China saves one piece of paper every day,
nearly
a million trees can
be saved
in one day.
Therefore
, we
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must
realize the
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power
of each person and shoulder our
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own
responsibility.

Moreover
, the most
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important
thing
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must
be the effect on
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big
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companies
and factories caused by public awareness and habits.
Specifically
, environment-friendly behaviors of the public can
largely
influence the business strategies of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
big
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
.
For example
, when disposable plastic bags are not popular
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anymore
in the market, the manufacturers will
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stop
their production and find eco-friendly replacements such as fabric bags.
Thus
, the
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power
of
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individuals
is maximized
and
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makes
a
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big
difference.

However
,
that is
not to say we should
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ignore
the responsibility of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
big
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
.
Admittedly
, in solving
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
large-scale problems like deforestation and greenhouse effect, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
big
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
should
fully
harness their technology and
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power
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
up with strategic plans.

In conclusion
, the connection of every part of society wield a significant role to protect the environment.
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Only
in this way can we assure that we can hand over the planet to our
next
generation.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 11

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
291 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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