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Write at least 250 words. In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages v.1

In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages v. 1
In the last few years, the emergence of new subjects has challenged teaching jobs. Therefore, the teacher’s job-turnover ratio is rising gradually, especially at the secondary level, and most would prefer to work in other fields. This essay will discuss the major causes of this increasing unpopularity and suggest some solutions to curb the issues. Firstly, the reason for the declining popularity of the secondary level tutor’s role, in many cases, is due to the unattractive remuneration. Many teachers contend that their job benefits have fallen compared to the past, so they tend to pry for jobs offering lucrative perks. To illustrate, for the reason that most secondary level teachers are unfairly benefited, a number of them have either left their work or they have moved to the new fields. Thus, to tackle the issue, schools should motivate their teachers by offering attractive incentives. For example, if they increase the instructor’s pay, they will be motivated to work in their current position, and this would reduce the turnover rate. Another problem is that students are not well-behaved. This is because most students are aberrant, and they mostly create problems, thus, many teachers dislike it. For example, some students often create disturbances in class, and they are usually unabashed for their conduct, which is hated by their instructors. The solution is for the school to create stringent rules to obstruct such behaviors, which is deviated and off standard. By embarking on a strict regulation, students will be well-behaved, and this will solve the issue. All things considered, the cause of falling secondary level teachers is mainly due to the unfair compensation and undisciplined students; therefore, to tackle these issues, schools should pay their instructors fairly and accentuate stringent rules and regulation. Unless the school management makes such efforts, the issues will go unnoticed.
In the last few years, the emergence of new subjects has challenged teaching jobs.
Therefore
, the
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teacher’s
job-turnover ratio is rising
gradually
,
especially
at the
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secondary
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level
, and most would prefer to work in other fields. This essay will discuss the major causes of this increasing unpopularity and suggest
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some
solutions to curb the issues.

Firstly
, the reason for the declining popularity of the
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secondary
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level
tutor’s role, in
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many
cases, is due to the unattractive remuneration.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
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teachers
contend that their job benefits have fallen compared to the past,
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so
they tend to pry for jobs offering lucrative perks. To illustrate, for the reason that most
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secondary
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level
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teachers
are
unfairly
benefited, a number of them have either
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left
their work or they have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
moved
to the new fields.
Thus
, to tackle the issue,
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schools
should motivate their
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teachers
by offering attractive incentives.
For example
, if they increase the instructor’s pay, they will
be motivated
to work in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
position, and this would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the turnover rate.

Another problem is that
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students
are not well-behaved. This is
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because
most
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students
are aberrant, and they
mostly
create problems,
thus
,
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many
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teachers
dislike it.
For example
,
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some
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students
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often
create disturbances in
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class
, and they are
usually
unabashed for their conduct, which
is hated
by their instructors. The solution is for the
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school
to create stringent
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
to obstruct such behaviors, which
is deviated
and off standard. By embarking on a strict regulation,
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students
will be well-behaved, and this will solve the issue.

All things considered, the cause of falling
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
secondary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
level
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teachers
is
mainly
due to the unfair compensation and undisciplined
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students
;
therefore
, to tackle these issues,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
should pay their instructors
fairly
and accentuate stringent
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and regulation. Unless the
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school
management
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
such efforts, the issues will go unnoticed.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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