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Write about the following topic: •The television is good for you. •Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of watching television. v.2

: •The television is good for you. •Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of watching television. v. 2
Nowadays, It is clear that more and more people are migrating to urban areas for education and the better life. This mass migration has caused, one of the biggest problems of society in the form of overpopulation. This problem is becoming worse and worse, particularly in the Asian countries. This essay will look at some of the problems of this and propose some solutions. One of the main issues of overpopulation is an increase in the prices of everyday needs and housing. Due to less availability of land in urban areas the housing prices are growing rapidly. For example, In the city of Mumbai, the price of a double bedroom apartment has reached 10 million and it is expected to grow more in the coming decade. To tackle this problem, the governments should encourage companies to set up their bases in nearby suburbs or outskirts. This allows people to live outside the urban areas. The second issue of this is urban pollution and health issues. Due to the growth in construction sector there are very high chances of dust pollution resulting in lung diseases and because of poor drainage facilities, cities often get flooded with rain water causing diseases like malaria. For example, over the past decade the pollution released from the city of Delhi got doubled causing problems. Dealing with this involves involves governments by cracking illegal constructions and developing effective drain facilities. People also should be encouraged to move out of overpopulated cities to nearby suburbs by ensuring good transportation facilities. To sum up, there is no doubt that overpopulation is becoming a serious issue in bigger cities. Unless people look for nearby towns to live, this issue would not be solved. Campaigns should be done about the problems of more population. In my view, although it is the responsibility of the governments to provide better living conditions, people should also be aware of the problems and should look for new living options.
Nowadays, It is
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clear
that more and more
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people
are migrating to
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urban
areas for education and the better life. This mass migration has caused, one of the biggest
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problems
of society in the form of overpopulation. This
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problem
is becoming worse and worse,
particularly
in the Asian countries.
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This
essay will look at
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some of the
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problems
of this and propose
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some
solutions.

One of the main
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issues
of overpopulation is an increase in the prices of everyday needs and housing. Due to less availability of land in
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urban
areas the housing prices are growing
rapidly
.
For example
, In the city of Mumbai, the price of a double bedroom apartment has reached 10 million and it is
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expected
to grow more in the coming decade. To tackle this
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problem
, the
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governments
should encourage
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companies
to set up their bases in nearby suburbs or outskirts. This
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allows
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people
to
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live
outside the
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urban
areas.

The second
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issue
of this is
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urban
pollution and health
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issues
. Due to the growth in construction sector there are
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very
high chances of dust pollution resulting in lung diseases and
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because
of poor drainage facilities,
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cities
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often
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get
flooded with rain water causing diseases like malaria.
For example
, over the past decade the pollution released from the city of Delhi
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got
doubled causing
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problems
. Dealing with this
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involves involves
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governments
by cracking illegal constructions and developing effective drain facilities.
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People
also
should
be encouraged
to
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move
out of overpopulated
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cities
to nearby suburbs by ensuring
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good
transportation facilities.

To sum up, there is no doubt that overpopulation is becoming a serious
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issue
in bigger
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cities
. Unless
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people
look for nearby towns to
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live
, this
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issue
would not
be solved
. Campaigns should
be done
about the
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problems
of more population. In my view, although it is the responsibility of the
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governments
to provide better living conditions,
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people
should
also
be aware of the
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problems
and should look for new living options.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay : •The television is good for you. •Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of watching television. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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Grammatical Range: 7.5
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Task Achievement: 7.5
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