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Write a letter to your friend about a book that you have read recently. Include the following in your letter: – Describe the book. – Why do you want him/her to read it? – Tell him/her how to get the book. v.1

Write a letter to your friend about a book that you have read recently. Include the following in your letter: – Describe the book. – Why do you want him/her to read it? – Tell him/her how to get the book. v. 1
It is argued that in recent times the way men and women communicate with each other has been changed due to technology. This harms the relationships because it decreases face to face interaction among people and they do not have time for their loved ones. Most of the people these days interact with each other through digital media that reduces face-to-face interactions. In other words, people are addicted to social media to an extent that they have forgotten their families and living relations. Therefore, they are more interested in virtual relationships rather than talking to people in person. For example, research done by the Times of India in 2014 showed that there has been a 30 percent decrease in face-to-face interaction among people in the last 10 years after the use of advanced technology. People do not spend time with their families because they are always busy with their online friends and spend most of their time on mobile phones and on social networking sites. This is to say that, in earlier times people used to spend their leisure time with families and are involved in family gatherings, but now this trend has been changed with the invention of technology. Therefore, it has become a negative development because relationships between members of families are getting weaker. For instance, according to a recent survey by the New York Times 70 percent of the people spend their free time on phones and the rest 30 percent are those who spend the time with families. In conclusion, technology has affected the relationships in a negative way this is because it reduces interaction between people in person and they do not spend sufficient amount of time with their families.
It
is argued
that in recent
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times
the way
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men
and women communicate with each other has been
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changed
due to technology. This harms the
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relationships
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because
it decreases face to face
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interaction
among
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people and
they do not have
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time
for their
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loved
ones.

Most of the
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people
these days interact with each other through digital media that
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reduces
face-to-face
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interactions
.
In other words
,
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people
are addicted
to social media to an extent that they have forgotten their
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families
and living relations.
Therefore
, they are more interested in virtual
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relationships
rather
than talking to
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people
in person.
For example
, research done by the
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Times
of India in 2014
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showed
that there has been a 30 percent decrease in face-to-face
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interaction
among
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people
in the last 10 years after the
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use
of advanced technology.

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People
do not
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spend
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time
with their
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families
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because
they are always busy with their online friends and
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spend
most of their
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time
on mobile phones and on social networking sites. This is to say that, in earlier
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times
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people
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used
to
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spend
their leisure
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time
with
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families
and
are involved
in
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family
gatherings,
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but
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now
this trend has been
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changed
with the invention of technology.
Therefore
, it has become a
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negative
development
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because
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relationships
between members of
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families
are getting weaker.
For instance
, according to a recent survey by the New York
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Times
70 percent of the
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people
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spend
their free
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time
on phones and the rest 30 percent are those who
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spend
the
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time
with families.

In conclusion
, technology has
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affected
the
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relationships
in a
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negative
way this is
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because
it
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reduces
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interaction
between
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people
in
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person and
they do not
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spend
sufficient amount of
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time
with their
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families
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Write a letter to your friend about a book that you have read recently. Include the following in your letter: – Describe the book. – Why do you want him/her to read it? – Tell him/her how to get the book. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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