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Write a letter to your friend about a job offer that can be suitable for him/her and say Describe the jobwhat are the facilities availablewhy this job suitable for him v.1

Write a letter to your friend about a job offer that can be suitable for him/her and say Describe the jobwhat are the facilities availablewhy this job suitable for him v. 1
Knowledge is mainly theoretical and practical based in the contemporary era. It is considered by some that in all stages of learning from primary to higher education, an excessive amount of time is allocated to theoretical learning and not satisfactory for practical skills acquisition. I completely agree with this statement ad this essay will discuss reasons for it. Firstly, in primary schools, significant emphasis is on the theoretical knowledge acquisition and rare on practical learning. Children in the primary-level are restricted to concentrate on rote learning considerably by teaching them theory all the time. They are less likely to be exposed to practical activities in academics. A recent report from Oxford University, for instance, showed that the theoretical earning of children in Asian schools at the primary-level is 95% and practical-based education is 5% only. Secondly, institutions providing tertiary education are also focusing enormously on the theoretical aspect of learning. This is because after completing higher education, even individuals are not well prepared for the challenges of the workforce environment due to their involvement in learning the theoretical aspect of subjects highly and practical one rarely. It is evident from different studies that students in each semester in universities are usually given five theoretical-based subjects and only one practical-based. Research by the World Education System, for example, revealed that tertiary education in Malaysia is resulting in producing 85% of theoretical knowledge and 15% of practical learning fostering in every undergraduate student. In conclusion, it is argued that from the beginning of education to the university level, a considerable amount of time is utilized in learning theory and not enough on practical knowledge acquisition. In my view, I fully agree with this view since children are usually taught theory in primary schools and universities are unable to produce individuals who can acquire a job after graduation owing to theoretical-based learning.
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Knowledge
is
mainly
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theoretical
and
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practical
based in the contemporary era. It
is considered
by
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some
that in all stages of
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learning
from primary to higher
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education
, an excessive amount of time
is allocated
to
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theoretical
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learning
and not satisfactory for
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practical
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skills
acquisition. I completely
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agree
with this statement ad this essay will discuss reasons for it.

Firstly
, in primary schools, significant emphasis is on the
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theoretical
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knowledge
acquisition and rare on
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practical
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learning
. Children in the primary-level
are restricted
to concentrate on rote
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learning
considerably
by teaching them theory all the time. They are less likely to
be exposed
to
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practical
activities in academics. A recent report from Oxford
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University
,
for instance
,
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showed
that the
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theoretical
earning of children in Asian schools at the primary-level is 95% and practical-based
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education
is 5%
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only
.

Secondly
, institutions providing tertiary
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education
are
also
focusing
enormously
on the
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theoretical
aspect of
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learning
. This is
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because
after completing higher
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education
, even individuals are not
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well prepared
for the challenges of the workforce environment due to their involvement in
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learning
the
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theoretical
aspect of subjects
highly
and
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practical
one
The adverb 'rarely' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
rarely
. It is evident from
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different
studies that students in each semester in
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universities
are
usually
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given
five theoretical-based subjects and
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only
one practical-based. Research by the World
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Education
System,
for example
, revealed that tertiary
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education
in Malaysia is resulting in producing 85% of
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theoretical
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knowledge
and 15% of
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practical
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learning
If 'learning' is used as a verb, it usually requires the infinitive: "to foster".
fostering
in every undergraduate student.

In conclusion
, it
is argued
that from the beginning of
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education
to the
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university
level, a considerable amount of time
is utilized
in
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learning
theory and not
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enough
on
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practical
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knowledge
acquisition. In my view, I
fully
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agree
with this view since children are
usually
taught theory in primary schools and
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universities
are unable to produce individuals who can acquire a job after graduation owing to theoretical-based
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learning
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Write a letter to your friend about a job offer that can be suitable for him/her and say Describe the jobwhat are the facilities availablewhy this job suitable for him v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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