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Write about the following topic The best way to plan a holiday is by not planning at all To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience You s v.2

The best way to plan a holiday is by not planning at all with this statement 2
there is no doubt that holidays plays a key role in boosting our energy. hence it is important to consider how to spend them effectively. While some people believe that the optimum way to plan a holiday is by not putting any plans at all, others argue that it have to be arranged previously in order to get better results. I completely agree with the later opinion for two reasons, which I will be discussing here. First and foremost, the ignorance of setting a timetable for your holiday may result in wasting your time in many ways. First, if you are spending your vacation at home or at your city, there are enormous activities to do, and the decission making probably will take a long time. Additionally, if you are spending your time abroad, you may waste a lot of time in transport by not arranging your trip previously. To explain, you may decide to visit two far sightseeing, which are close to each other, hence you take the long distance twice either than arranging to visit both places at the same day. Moreover, if you are opting for spending your holiday in a tour, putting a plan for your movement could help you a great deal not only in saving time, but also in cost reduction too. For example, if your plan is to visit Paris, Amsterdam, and Rome by car, you should previously check the map and plan to move from those cities according to their locations, also you should arrange all places you want to visit inside every city individually. Finally, not planning probably leads to missing important activities or places to visit in your holiday. To explain, a recent survey on trip Advisor, which is a web-site for booking trips, demonsentrated that the number of tourists who missed up visiting paramount places in their travels, had not planned their holidays before travelling. In conclusion, I believe that not planning for holidays reduces their enjoyment. This is because with out that plan, a lot of time will be wasted in many ways and too many activities will be missed as mentioned previously.
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there
is no doubt that
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holidays
plays a key role in boosting our energy.
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hence
it is
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important
to consider how to spend them
effectively
. While
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some
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people
believe that the optimum way to
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plan
a
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holiday
is by not putting any
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plans
at all, others argue that it
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have to
be arranged
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previously
in order to
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get
better results. I completely
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agree
with the later opinion for two reasons, which I will be discussing here.

First
and foremost, the ignorance of setting a timetable for your
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holiday
may result in wasting your
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time
in
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many
ways.
First
, if you are spending your vacation at home or at your city, there are enormous activities to do, and the
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decission
making
probably
will take a long
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time
.
Additionally
, if you are spending your
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time
abroad, you may waste
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a lot of
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time
in transport by not arranging your trip
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previously
. To
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explain
, you may decide to
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visit
two far sightseeing, which are close to each other,
hence
you take the long distance twice either than arranging to
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visit
both
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places
at the same day.
Moreover
, if you are opting for spending your
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holiday
in a tour, putting a
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plan
for your movement could
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help
you a great deal not
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only
in saving
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time
,
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but
also
in cost reduction too.
For example
, if your
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plan
is to
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visit
Paris, Amsterdam, and Rome by car, you should
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previously
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check
the map and
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plan
to
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move
from those cities according to their locations,
also
you should arrange all
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places
you want to
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visit
inside every city
individually
.

Finally
, not planning
probably
leads to missing
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important
activities or
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places
to
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visit
in your
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holiday
. To
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explain
, a recent survey on trip Advisor, which is a web-site for booking trips,
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demonsentrated
that the number of tourists who missed up visiting paramount
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places
The usual collocation for "their travels" is "on their travels" or "during their travels".
in their travels
, had not planned their
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holidays
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before
travelling.

In conclusion
, I believe that not planning for
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holidays
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reduces
their enjoyment. This is
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because
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with out
that
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plan
,
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a lot of
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time
will
be wasted
in
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many
ways and too
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many
activities will
be missed
as mentioned
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previously
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay The best way to plan a holiday is by not planning at all with this statement 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
355 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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