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Write about the following topic: Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. v.2

: Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 2
Education is an important element in a child's development. Many people claim that children learning progress are better at home, rather other opinion supporting schools as the best option. Firstly, this essay will explain pros of the home teaching, it will also cover advantages for children to be educated in the same schools, I will explain my opinion. It is true that more often we can hear parents want to teach own kid at known environment. Homeschooling as advantage has a less stressful environment, flexible time and individual approach. From my experience, this way of learning can be beneficial for the sensible children or those ones who are stressed going to the school because of any reasonable execution. Apart from that, schools representing own benefits and they are supported with many more parents. On top of that educational institutions have more advanced infrastructure, equipment and different educators which covers weather knowledge. As an example, they have a better laboratory for physics or chemistry to do different experiments. On the other side, kids need to be socialized, learn and grow with different kids what should better prepare them for the future life. Taking everything into consideration, both opinions have positive and negative effects on children. The child's need to understand school systems and they will take all benefits to increase knowledge and personal interaction with different classmates. In, my opinion any child need to attend education in the schools, but system needs to support the adolescent to be educated at home as well, when they situation expecting so.
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important
element in a child's development.
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people
claim that
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children
learning progress are better at home,
rather
other opinion supporting
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schools
as the best option.
Firstly
, this essay will
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explain
pros of the home teaching, it will
also
cover advantages for
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children
to
be educated
in the same
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schools
, I will
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explain
my opinion.

It is true that more
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often
we can hear parents want to teach
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own
kid at known environment. Homeschooling as advantage has a less stressful environment, flexible time and individual approach. From my experience, this way of learning can be beneficial for the sensible
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children
or
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those ones
who are
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stressed
going to the
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school
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because
of any reasonable execution.

Apart from that,
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schools
representing
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own
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benefits and
they
are supported
with
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many
more parents.
On top of that
educational institutions have more advanced infrastructure, equipment and
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different
educators which covers weather knowledge. As an example, they have a better laboratory for physics or chemistry to do
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different
experiments. On the other side, kids
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need
to
be socialized
, learn and grow with
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different
kids what should better prepare them for the future life.

Taking everything into consideration, both opinions have
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positive
and
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negative
effects on
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children
. The child's
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need
to understand
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school
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systems and
they will take all benefits to increase knowledge and personal interaction with
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different
classmates. In, my opinion any child
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need
to attend education in the
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schools
,
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but
system
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needs
to support the adolescent to
be educated
at home
as well
, when
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they situation
expecting
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5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay : Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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