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Task 2 Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. v.1

Task 2 Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 1
Every country has its own system for schooling their own children, as well the parents have their own believe how they want their children to be educated, whether they want to be thought at school environment or at house, despite that the teaching material in both ways are the same but I believe that school teaching are much better for the development of the child's personality and his social life. Although that the parents had a rational opinion on why they think house teaching is better for the child development and they want to protect him from the bad influence that they can get or they afraid that they are not spending much with the family so by this they can bond much more. But they are forgetting that eventually they had to send him outside to continue his study outside the house boundaries to complete his higher education, and life is hard by not let him study in school environment they are preventing them from learning how to adapt in real life and how to interact with people, which is an essential skill in life, also, one the main advantages of school teaching, it’s that will help them to develop their character. For example, I know someone who is house schooling, told me that despite he loved his house schooling at the beginning, but afterward, when he started college he struggled in his first years due to he didn’t know how to deal with his teachers even at work his personality was still under development. In conclusion, I know that parent they afraid for their children, but they have to remember that nothing comes easy in life and facing the danger in daily basis, that’s what life is, and they must not prevent their children from the experience that they will get in school.
Every country has its
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system for schooling their
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own
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children
,
as well
the parents have their
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believe
how they want their
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to
be educated
, whether they want to be
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thought
at
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school
environment or at
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house
, despite that the
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teaching
material in both ways are the same
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but
I believe that
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school
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teaching
are much better for the development of the child's personality and his social life.

Although that the parents had a rational opinion on why they
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think
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house
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teaching
is better for the child
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development and
they want to protect him from the
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bad
influence that they can
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get or
they afraid that they are not spending much with the family
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so
by this they can bond much more.

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they are forgetting that
eventually
they had to
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send
him outside to continue his study outside the
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boundaries to complete his higher education, and
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life
is
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hard
by not
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let
him study in
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school
environment they are preventing them from learning how to adapt in real
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life
and how to interact with
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people
, which is an essential
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skill
in
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life
,
also
, one the main advantages of
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school
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teaching
, it’s that will
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help
them to develop their character.

For example
, I know someone who is
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schooling,
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told
me that despite he
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loved
his
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house
schooling at the beginning,
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but
afterward, when he
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started
college he struggled in his
first
years due to he didn’t know how to deal with his teachers even at work his personality was
still
under development.

In conclusion
, I know that parent they afraid for their
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children
,
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but
they
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have to
remember that nothing
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comes
easy in
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life
and facing the
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danger
in daily basis, that’s what
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life
is, and they
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must
not
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prevent
their
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children
from the experience that they will
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get
in
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school
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Task 2 Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
305 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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