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Write about the following topic: Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. v.1

: Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 1
The argument over whether learning at home or at school is better for children has not been settled yet. Whereas home education offers better protection with individual learning and opportunities for families to bond, schools have a superior range of material and human resources. Ultimately, I think the school experience is best for children. There are several advantages for children who learn at home. Firstly, they can spend more time with their parents and siblings. Many social problems are associated with families not spending enough quality time together. Teaching children at home also provides them with an individualised learning environment. Instruction is custom-designed and moves at the child’s own pace and in accordance with his or her individual learning style. Finally, home schooling protects children from bullies and others who might be a bad influence. On the other hand, the school environment also offers advantages for children. Schools encourage children to socialise with their peers and learn how to cope with gossip, bullying and peer pressure. In addition, children will receive better tuition across a range of disciplines, as schools have teachers who are trained in special subjects. What is more, schools provide better access to physical resources such as sports equipment, musical instruments and library books. I believe that children are better off in a school environment. Although family time and individual learning are important, the range of expertise and resources that schools offer cannot be matched in the home. School environments may present difficult social situations, but so too does the real world and children must learn to navigate these on their own.
The argument over whether
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learning
at home or at
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school
is
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better
for
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children
has not
been settled
yet
. Whereas home education offers
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better
protection with individual
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learning
and opportunities for families to bond,
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schools
have a superior range of material and human resources.
Ultimately
, I
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think
the
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school
experience is best for children.

There are several advantages for
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children
who learn at home.
Firstly
, they can spend more time with their parents and siblings.
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Many
social problems
are associated
with families not spending
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enough
quality time together. Teaching
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children
at home
also
provides them with an
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individualised
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learning
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environment
. Instruction is custom-designed and
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moves
at the child’s
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own
pace and in accordance with
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his or her
individual
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learning
style.
Finally
,
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home schooling
protects
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children
from bullies
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and others
who might be a
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bad
influence.

On the other hand
, the
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school
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environment
also
offers advantages for
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children
.
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Schools
encourage
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children
to
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socialise
with their peers and learn how to cope with gossip, bullying and peer pressure.
In addition
,
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children
will receive
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better
tuition across a range of disciplines, as
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schools
have teachers who
are trained
in special subjects.
What is more
,
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schools
provide
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better
access to physical resources such as sports equipment, musical instruments and library books.

I believe that
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children
are
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better
off in a
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school
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environment
. Although family time and individual
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learning
are
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important
, the range of expertise and resources that
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schools
offer cannot
be matched
in the home.
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School
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environments
may present difficult social situations,
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but
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so
too does the real world and
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children
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must
learn to navigate these on their
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own
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay : Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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