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Write about the following topic: People nowadays prefer to interact online (e. g. do shopping, chat with friends) rather than talking to other people face-to-face. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. v.1

: People nowadays prefer to interact online (e. g. do shopping, chat with friends) rather than talking to other people face-to-face. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development? v. 1
In the last decade, people started using the internet frequently. Many people use the internet to do shopping or to communicate with other people easily using social media. However, some people think that the use of the internet should be reduced. Usually, there are two good reasons why people should use the internet, there are also two good reasons for reducing the use of the internet. To begin with, there are two good reasons why people should use the internet. Firstly, people feel comfortable using social media to interact with others all around the world. For example, using the internet can prevent people from using face to face communication which can be stressful for some people. Also, using social media can help people interact with each other all around the world without the need for travelling which can save money and time. Secondly, people use online shopping because saves money and time. For instance, online shopping can prevent people from using transportation, which can save a lot of time which could be used to do better things. Besides, the internet can save money because online shopping offers so many discounts that are rarely found in the market. Thirdly, On the other hand, two are good reasons why people should reduce the use of the internet. First, One serious problem that can arise due to using the internet is that it can make people isolated. To illustrate, if a person spent a lot of his time using the internet he won’t find time to see his friends or family. Also, if a person spent all of his time on the internet he may only have virtual friends, which can affect his personality in the future. Second, using the internet for online shopping can sometimes be risky and unsafe. For example, the major risk that could harm people when using online shopping websites is hacking credit card information to steal people's money. Furthermore, some online shopping websites can sometimes be scams and risky because they provide a fake review on their products. To conclude, although there are several disadvantages of using the internet, there are several advantages that are a worthy consideration. In my opinion, using the internet is the best way to communicate and buy things online because it saves money and time.
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of the internet should be
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good
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reasons
why
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the internet, there are
also
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for reducing the
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the internet.
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feel comfortable using social media to interact with others all around the world.
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, using the internet can
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prevent
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people
from using face to face communication which can be stressful for
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some
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people
.
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, using social media can
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help
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people
interact with each
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other
all around the world without the need for travelling which can
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save
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money
and
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time
.
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,
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people
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use
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online
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shopping
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because
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saves
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money
and
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time
.
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online
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can
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prevent
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people
from using transportation, which can
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save
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a lot of
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time
which could be
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used
to do better things.
Besides
, the internet can
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save
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money
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because
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online
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shopping
offers
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discounts that are rarely found in the market.
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the
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of the internet.
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, One serious problem that can arise due to using the internet is that it can
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make
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people
isolated. To illustrate, if a person spent
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a lot of
his
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time
using the internet he won’t find
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time
to
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see
his friends or family.
Also
, if a person spent all of his
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on the internet he may
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have virtual friends, which can affect his personality in the future. Second, using the internet for
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online
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shopping
can
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be risky and unsafe.
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that could harm
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people
when using
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websites is hacking credit card information to steal
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people
's
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money
.
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some
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online
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websites can
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sometimes
be scams and risky
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they provide a fake review on their products.

To conclude
, although there are several disadvantages of using the internet, there are several advantages that are a worthy consideration. In my opinion, using the internet is the best way to communicate and
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buy
things
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online
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because
it
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17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
57Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay : People nowadays prefer to interact online (e. g. do shopping, chat with friends) rather than talking to other people face-to-face. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
382 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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