Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Write about the following topic: In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

: In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? v. 1
Old-age is itself very complex part of life as compared to other phases. In countries like Britain where kids do not stay with their parents, there is a concept where old people tend to live together and generally, the Government pays for the nurse to look after. The question arises that who should be liable to pay for these expenses? Whether it should be borne by the Government or by the Family of these fellows? This essay will focus on the challenges being faced by people from Old age and share views on expenses too. Old-age, being a very critical time of one's life, where a person becomes sensitive enough to feel sick often, plus getting anything done without any help becomes difficult as well. It is good to know that instead of living alone, people choose to live with their fellow mates of the same age group and intellect, where they get to share their views and posses a one-generation mindset. With the growing age, everyone needs continuous care which in return comes with a cost. The fact that the Government bearing these expenses shows that the country is looking after their senior-citizens which anyone expects from his or her motherland, someone who has been an honest taxpayer, this is a way his/her country is thanking them. Although the government pays for expenditures of a nurse, I believe their family should also play a part here. As a kid, our parents have been taking care of us from the very beginning and it's the duty of their kids to take care of them too. In conclusion, there are certain areas of improvement. Let's say keeping aside the nursing cost, there are a few other expenditures too, which can be borne by the family in a share so the burden doesn't fall on entirely on, either, the governing authorities or just the family.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Old
-age is itself
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
complex part of life as compared to other phases. In countries like Britain where kids do not stay with their parents, there is a concept where
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
together and
generally
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Government
pays for the nurse to look after. The question arises that who should be liable to pay for these expenses? Whether it should
be borne
by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Government
or by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Family
of these fellows? This essay will focus on the challenges
being faced
by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Old
age and share views on expenses too.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Old
-age, being a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
critical time of one's life, where a person becomes sensitive
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to feel sick
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
, plus getting anything done without any
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
becomes difficult
as well
. It is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
to know that
instead
of living alone,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
choose to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
with their fellow mates of the same age group and intellect, where they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to share their views and posses a one-generation mindset. With the growing age, everyone needs continuous care which in return
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
with a cost. The fact that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Government
bearing these expenses
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
that the country is looking after their senior-citizens which anyone
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expects
from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
his or her
motherland, someone who has been an honest taxpayer, this is a way his/her country is thanking them.

Although the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
pays for expenditures of a nurse, I believe their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
should
also
play a part here. As a kid, our parents have been taking care of us from the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
beginning and it's the duty of their kids to take care of them too.
In conclusion
, there are certain areas of improvement.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
's say keeping aside the nursing cost, there are a few other expenditures too, which can
be borne
by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
in a share
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
the burden doesn't fall on
entirely
on, either, the governing authorities or
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay : In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
313 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts