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Write about the following topic: A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercises and avoids stressWhat should people do to stay healthy in your country? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examp v.1

: A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercises and avoids stressWhat should people do to stay healthy in your country? 1
In today’s world car is one of basic necessity. Fossil fuel consumed cars to be replaced with electric cars highly debated among people. I do not agree with this due to the economic slowdown of country and reliability of electric vehicle reliability. First of all, If all the diesel and petrol cars will be replaced by the electric cars, it may cause an economic slowdown for a country. Almost all countries in the world depend on various taxes such as road tax, GST and they get larger share of taxes from automobile industry. People buy cars and they pay road tax. Even they pay GST for every litre of petrol or diesel they buy from petrol pump therefore this is one of the most reliable and important source of income for the government. For example, India is second most populated country in the world with 130 billion people and according to a report from RTO over 40 billion people have cars in India. If the government replaces fuel consumpted cars with electric cars they lost all the tax revenue from automobile industry which will cause an economic slowdown. Another important issue with electric cars is that, they are not reliable enough to replace fuel consumpted cars. We do not able to found charging point easily for electric vehicle in most of the places. To explain this, If someone needs to travel long, they can not rely on electric cars blindly. To Exemplify this, I have my uncle's example, they bought an electric car last year and went on a long drive. His car stop working due to car battery dries-up on the road in between his trip and they do not able to found any charging point so they left his car on the road. To sum up, electric automobile are not reliable enough for an long journey and country get lots of money in term of taxes on petrol or diesel purchase. I do not agree with the opinion of replacing cars who burn fossil fuel with electric car due to country economy slowdown and reliability issues in near future.
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today
’s world
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car
is one of basic necessity. Fossil
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fuel
consumed
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cars
to
be replaced
with
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electric
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cars
highly
debated among
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people
. I do not
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agree
with this due to the economic slowdown of
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country
and reliability of
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electric
vehicle reliability.

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, If all the diesel and
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petrol
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cars
will
be replaced
by the
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electric
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cars
, it may cause an economic slowdown for a
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country
. Almost all
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countries
in the world depend on various
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taxes
such as road
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tax
,
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GST and
they
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get
larger share of
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taxes
from automobile industry.
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People
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buy
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cars
and they pay road
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tax
. Even they pay GST for every
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litre
of
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petrol
or diesel they
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buy
from
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petrol
pump
therefore
this is one of the most reliable and
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important
source of income for the
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government
.
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, India is second most populated
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country
in the world with 130 billion
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people
and according to a report from RTO over 40 billion
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people
have
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cars
in India.
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If
the
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government
replaces
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fuel
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consumpted
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cars
with
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electric
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cars
they lost all the
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tax
revenue from automobile industry which will cause an economic slowdown.

Another
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important
issue with
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electric
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cars
is that, they are not reliable
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enough
to replace
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fuel
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consumpted
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cars
. We do not able to found charging point
easily
for
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electric
vehicle in most of the places. To
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explain
this, If someone needs to travel long, they can not rely on
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electric
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cars
blindly
. To Exemplify this, I have my uncle's example, they
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bought
an
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electric
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car
last year and went on a long drive. His
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car
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stop
working due to
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car
battery dries-up on the road in between his
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trip and
they do not able to found any charging point
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so
they
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left
his
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car
on the road.

To sum up,
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electric
automobile are not reliable
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enough
for
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an
long journey and
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country
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get
lots of money in term of
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taxes
on
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petrol
or diesel
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purchase
. I do not
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agree
with the opinion of replacing
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cars
who burn fossil
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fuel
with
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electric
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car
due to
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country
economy slowdown and reliability issues in near future.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay : A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercises and avoids stressWhat should people do to stay healthy in your country? 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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