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Some people say that selff-employment is better than a job in a company or an institution. Discus both the views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people say that selff-employment is better than a job in a company or an institution. Discus both the views and give your opinion. v. 1
Owing of innovation in industry and education system, an abundance of opportunities for people to pursue. However, still there is a debate running between a job and self-employment. I always believe self-employment has upper hand in debates. This essay is regarding the views of both employment and self-employment. Reason why self-employment a step ahead is it has insane growth when compared to the job. Moreover, not answerable to anyone, can explore and experiment new ideas. Initial stage plays a vital role in self-employment, so more prominence is required. After triumphing, freedom to do work in flexible timings is an advantage. Whereas in job there is no such kind of freedom, have to work on fixed timings. Besides, changing of policies and taking own decisions is only possible in freelancing. On the other hand, a job is more secure than freelancing in many aspects. Job has fixed income every month. Nevertheless, more work stress during office hours, in the rare cases employee may work in his free time to complete it. No freedom and it is not possible for exploring new ideas, have to follow certain policies of a company. But, it takes plenty of time to be financially stable, sometimes it may take years. Finally, both have its pros and cons. After all these assumptions, it is entirely depending on the individual. If an individual is looking for an instant gratification and fixed payout with fixed working hours, job is a good option. But a person with long vision and missions sacrifice everything in initial states and after many sleepless nights, he enjoys triumph. Overall, self-employment is always a step ahead.
Owing of innovation in industry and education system, an abundance of opportunities for
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people
to pursue.
However
,
still
there is a debate running between a
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job
and self-employment. I always believe self-employment has upper hand in debates. This essay is regarding the views of both employment and self-employment.

Reason why self-employment a step ahead is it has insane growth when compared to the
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job
.
Moreover
, not answerable to anyone, can explore and experiment new
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ideas
. Initial stage plays a vital role in self-employment,
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so
more prominence
is required
. After triumphing, freedom to do
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work
in flexible timings is an advantage. Whereas in
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job
there is no such kind of freedom,
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have to
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work
on
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fixed
timings.
Besides
, changing of policies and taking
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own
decisions is
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only
possible in freelancing.

On the other hand
, a
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job
is more secure than freelancing in
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many
aspects.
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Job
has
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fixed
income every month.
Nevertheless
, more
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work
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stress
during office hours, in the rare
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cases
employee may
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work
in his free time to complete it. No freedom and it is not possible for exploring new
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ideas
,
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have to
follow certain policies of a
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company
.
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But
, it takes
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plenty
of time to be
financially
stable,
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sometimes
it may take years.

Finally
, both have its pros and cons.
After all
these assumptions, it is
entirely
depending on the individual. If an individual is looking for an instant gratification and
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fixed
payout with
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fixed
working hours,
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job
is a
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good
option.
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But
a person with long vision and missions sacrifice everything in initial states and after
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many
sleepless nights, he enjoys triumph.
Overall
, self-employment is always a step ahead.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that selff-employment is better than a job in a company or an institution. Discus both the views and give your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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